Science— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Be more concise and complete your sentences. Start with a clear topic sentence, then give one or two specific reasons with linking words. Avoid listing too many vague items and finish the thought.

例: Yes, I do. Science is one of my favourite subjects because I enjoy learning about the Earth and living systems. For example, I find human biology fascinating since it explains how our bodies work, and I also like environmental science because it helps me understand climate change.

提案: Give a clear topic sentence, then expand with one or two specific details about what you learned or why the teacher was memorable. Reduce hesitation and grammar errors (e.g., tense and subject-verb agreement).

例: I began learning science in the fourth grade. My first science teacher, Monsieur Timur, made lessons memorable by doing many hands-on experiments, so I learned interesting facts about plants and animals early on.

提案: Avoid vague, repetitive answers. Choose one or two specific science subjects and explain why using linking words to make your answer coherent and informative.

例: I am most interested in biology and environmental science because biology helps me understand living organisms, while environmental science explains ecosystems and human impact on the planet.

提案: Organise your response: give a brief topic sentence, then describe the experiment clearly with specific steps, variables and results. Use linking words (for example, then, because) and correct grammar (e.g., singular/plural, clarity about conditions).

例: I have carried out a plant-growth experiment. For example, I placed seedlings in six different conditions — full sunlight, no light, light without airflow, and so on — and then compared their growth over two weeks to see which conditions helped them grow best.

提案: Expand your answer with a reason or an example to show engagement. Add a linking phrase and mention a specific programme or topic you enjoy if possible.

例: Yes, I do. I often watch documentaries about space and nature because they explain complex ideas clearly; for instance, I enjoy planetarium series that explore the solar system.

提案: Avoid saying you don't know. Instead, give an informed opinion or general observation and support it with reasoning or a personal example. Use hedging language if unsure (e.g., I think, perhaps).

例: I think many Chinese people visit science museums, especially families and school groups, because museums offer interactive exhibits that are popular for children's education and school trips.

× Definitely I do.

✓ Definitely, I do.

Add a comma after 'Definitely' to separate the adverbial starter from the main clause for natural spoken English pacing; this is a punctuation/structure issue rather than a tense or verb error.

× I take science every year, a deep science class 'cause I am interested in everything about our earth, planet, humanity, human body, animals, etcetera and I.

✓ I take science every year, including advanced classes, because I am interested in everything about the Earth, humanity, the human body, animals, and so on.

The original sentence is disfluent and ungrammatical in structure. Replace informal ''cause' with 'because', remove the trailing 'and I' fragment, capitalize 'Earth', and rephrase 'a deep science class' to 'including advanced classes' for clarity. This fixes sentence structure and word choice issues.

× I started learning about science in the 4th grade.

✓ I started learning about science in the fourth grade.

Spell out ordinal numbers in formal writing ('fourth' rather than '4th') and keep simple past tense 'started' which is correct; change to word form for style consistency.

× Uh, my teacher, my first teacher was Monsieur Timur. That taught me a lot of experience and facts about science that I didn't know before.

✓ My first teacher was Monsieur Timur. He taught me a lot and gave me many facts about science that I didn't know before.

Replace the demonstrative pronoun 'That' (which incorrectly refers to a person) with 'He'. 'Taught me a lot of experience' is incorrect; use 'taught me a lot' or 'gave me a lot of experience' depending on meaning. This fixes pronoun misuse and sentence structure.

× Which science subject is interesting to you?

✓ Which science subject is most interesting to you?

Add 'most' to match the intended meaning 'which subject is interesting to you?' is acceptable but 'most interesting' is clearer; original is not grammatically wrong but improved for naturalness.

× I love every science subject. I find this very interesting.

✓ I love every science subject; I find them all very interesting.

'This' is a singular demonstrative that does not agree with plural 'every science subject'. Use 'them all' to refer to the multiple subjects. Also combine sentences for fluency.

× I have done an experiment, I took a bin and put it under 6 different ways and see how fast it grows under the sun without sun, without light, without light with air without air and it was pretty fun.

✓ I did an experiment: I put seeds in six bins and placed them under different conditions to see how fast they grew—with sunlight, without sunlight, with air, and without air. It was pretty fun.

Multiple issues: use simple past 'did' and 'put' to match past narration; spell out 'six'; clarify 'put it under 6 different ways' into 'placed them under different conditions'; correct 'see' to past 'saw' or rephrase to 'to see' as purpose; clarify contradictory 'under the sun without sun' to 'with sunlight, without sunlight'. This addresses tense, number, and sentence structure errors.

× Do you like watching science TV programs?

✓ Do you like watching science TV programs?

This sentence is already grammatically correct in present simple; no change necessary.

× Yes, I do.

✓ Yes, I do.

Correct as a short affirmative answer in present simple; no change needed.

× Do Chinese people often visit science museums?

✓ Do Chinese people often visit science museums?

The question is grammatically correct in present simple; no change needed.

× I have no idea.

✓ I don't know.

Both are acceptable; 'I don't know' is a more natural spoken response to the preceding question. Change for naturalness rather than grammar.