Science— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Be more concise and avoid repetitions. Start with a clear topic sentence, then give one specific example with linking words. Correct grammar (e.g., 'how to play computer games' or 'about new technology'), and keep it to 2–3 sentences.

例: Yes, I enjoy science because it helps me understand how things work. For example, I often watch short videos about new technology, such as how computer games are programmed, which motivates me to learn more about coding.

提案: Give a direct answer first and then add one clear supporting detail. Avoid filler words and finish your sentences. Use linking words like 'because' or 'for example' correctly.

例: I started learning about science in primary school, around seven or eight years old. For example, my teacher showed us simple plant experiments, which I enjoyed because they made scientific ideas easy to understand.

提案: Be specific and avoid unclear words. State the subject clearly, then describe one experiment with correct vocabulary and sequence words. Keep sentences short to prevent repetition and mistakes.

例: I find plant biology most interesting because its experiments are simple. For example, at school we grew beans in a cup and observed how roots and shoots developed over time.

提案: Answer directly with one or two concrete examples, using linking words like 'for example' or 'also'. Avoid repeating the same story; try to add a short result or what you learned from the activity.

例: I have done simple hands-on experiments, especially in primary school. For example, we grew beans in cups to observe germination, and I learned how seeds sprout and form roots and shoots.

提案: Make a clear statement (yes or no) and explain briefly why. Use correct verb forms and avoid unclear phrases. Give one specific example of what you prefer to watch and why.

例: Not really; I don't often watch science TV programs. Instead, I prefer short online videos about plant biology because they show simple experiments, like growing beans in a cup, which I can try at home.

提案: Answer with a clear opinion and support it with a specific reason or example. Use plural/singular forms correctly and avoid repetitions. Keep it to two sentences and include a linking phrase like 'for example' or 'because'.

例: Yes, I think many Chinese people visit science museums, especially children and students, because schools often organize trips. For example, I went with my class a few years ago and saw exhibits about plant growth.

× For example, I often watch short videos about about new technology or or how to use computer play games and make and then makes me to learn more.

✓ For example, I often watch short videos about new technology or about how to use a computer to play games, and they make me want to learn more.

The original sentence misuses base verbs and repetitions and needs gerunds and infinitives correctly. 'Watch' should be followed by noun phrases; 'about how to use a computer to play games' uses the infinitive 'to play' to express purpose. 'And then makes me to learn more' is incorrect: use 'they make me want to learn more' (make + object + bare infinitive). Remove duplicate words and add articles where needed. Suggestion: Use 'about how to' for actions, 'a computer' with article, and 'make + object + bare infinitive' for causation.

× While I started learning about science when I was in primary school around 7 or 8 years old, my teachers showed us simple experiments about plants and and I liked watching how things changed because it was interesting and easy to understand.

✓ I started learning about science when I was in primary school, around seven or eight years old; my teachers showed us simple experiments about plants, and I liked watching how things changed because it was interesting and easy to understand.

The subordinating adverb 'While' at the start is unnecessary and misleading with the past tense 'started'. Remove 'While' and keep past simple throughout for a clear narrative. Spell out numbers in formal speech and remove duplicate words. Use proper punctuation to separate clauses.

× For example, I.

✓ For example, I remember this clearly from those lessons.

The fragment 'For example, I.' is incomplete and lacks a verb and object. Complete the sentence by providing the action or memory being referenced to form a full clause.

× Plant biology interests me because the experiments are simple and easy to follow.

✓ Plant biology interests me because the experiments are simple and easy to follow.

This sentence is grammatically correct; no change is needed. It uses adjectives and adverbs appropriately. (Included to indicate no error under provided list.)

× I still remember growing beans in a cup at school and washing the washing the growing and and see how Rose and the shows appeared.

✓ I still remember growing beans in a cup at school and watching them grow and seeing how roots and shoots appeared.

The original contains repeated words, incorrect verbs ('washing' instead of 'watching'), and wrong nouns ('Rose' instead of 'roots', 'shows' instead of 'shoots'). Use gerunds 'watching' and 'seeing' to describe ongoing observations and correct the botanical terms. Remove duplicates.

× While I I still remember when I when I was in primary school around 7 or 8 years old, my teacher showed us simple experiments about plants and I like watching how things changed and for example, I still remember growing beans in a cup and at home to see how.

✓ I still remember when I was in primary school, around seven or eight years old; my teacher showed us simple experiments about plants, and I liked watching how things changed. For example, I grew beans in a cup at home to see how they developed.

Remove redundant words and 'While' which conflicts with past tense. Keep past simple verbs ('remember', 'was', 'showed', 'liked', 'grew') for past events. Complete the second clause with a subject and verb ('they developed') to avoid a sentence fragment.

× Actually, I don't always watching science TV programs.

✓ Actually, I don't always watch science TV programs.

After 'don't' use the base form of the verb, not the -ing form. 'Do not' is the auxiliary for present simple negation, so 'watch' is required.

× I prefer watch which shouts shout with you about plan plant biology and I can I can see I can see see growing beings in a cup at at home to see how Rose and the show's appeared.

✓ I prefer watching programs about plant biology because I can see seedlings growing in a cup at home and observe how roots and shoots appear.

The original has many errors: use the gerund 'watching' after 'prefer'; remove nonsense words like 'shouts' and duplicates; use 'programs' or 'programmes' for TV shows; use 'seedlings' or 'beans' and correct 'Rose and the show's' to 'roots and shoots'. Use present tense 'appear' for general observations.

× Well, I think many Chinese people do visit Science Museum, especially children and students because school often organize trips and I feel for example, I went with my Class A few years ago and and observation the being being how to grow thing in the cup.

✓ Well, I think many Chinese people do visit science museums, especially children and students, because schools often organize trips. For example, I went with my class a few years ago to observe how plants grow in a cup.

Use plural 'science museums' for general statement and lowercase common noun. 'School often organize' should be 'schools often organize' (subject-verb agreement and plural). 'Class' should be lowercase and not capitalized; remove duplicates and use 'observe how plants grow' for clarity. Also correct 'being being' and 'grow thing' to 'plants grow'.