Science— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Give a clear, direct response and organize ideas. Start with a simple statement (Yes/No), then briefly explain why using correct grammar and concise vocabulary. Avoid irrelevant phrases. Use linking words like "but" or "however" correctly.

例: No, I don't usually enjoy science because I found it difficult at school. However, recently I've become curious about space exploration after watching documentaries about planets and astronauts.

提案: Answer with a clear time reference and a concise reason. Use correct tense and complete sentences. Link the time reference to the reason with words like "because" or "since."

例: I started learning science in elementary school. I didn't enjoy it much back then because the lessons felt hard, but I still remember basic topics like plants and the solar system.

提案: Directly name the subject you find interesting and give one or two clear, specific reasons. Keep sentences short and logical, and avoid unrelated words. Use linking words like "because" or "for example."

例: I'm most interested in astronomy because I find the idea of other planets fascinating. For example, learning about black holes and how planets form makes me curious about the universe.

提案: Give a concrete example of an activity (e.g., visiting a planetarium, doing an experiment, watching a documentary). Describe briefly what you did and what you learned, using 2–3 clear sentences connected with simple linking words.

例: I haven't done many experiments, but I often visit planetarium shows and watch science documentaries. For example, a documentary about Mars missions made me more interested in how scientists search for signs of life.

提案: Start with a clear yes/no response, then explain briefly. If you watch related content on social media, say so and explain why. Use correct grammar and link ideas with "but" or "however."

例: Not really — I don't watch traditional science TV programs often because they can be slow. However, I do follow short science clips and scientist profiles on Instagram because they are more engaging and easier to watch.

提案: Answer about your knowledge directly and avoid unclear references. If unsure, say "Some people" or "Many people" and give a specific reason or example. Use correct sentence structure and avoid mixing countries unless relevant.

例: Yes, many people in China visit science museums, especially families and school groups. For instance, students often go on school trips to the China Science and Technology Museum to learn about technology and space.

× Actually I don't write science, but it is ironic history of my country.

✓ Actually I don't study science, but I am interested in the history of my country.

The student used the wrong verb 'write' instead of 'study' and 'it is ironic history of my country' is ungrammatical and unclear; 'am interested in the history of my country' correctly uses the verb 'be' + adjective and a noun phrase. Use 'study' for learning subjects and 'interested in' to express preference.

× So I not interested in science, but recently I have curious about outer space.

✓ So I am not interested in science, but recently I have become curious about outer space.

Missing auxiliary 'am' for the adjective 'not interested' is a verb omission (pronoun/verb issue). Also 'have curious' is incorrect; use 'have become curious' or 'am curious' to indicate change. Correct subject-verb structure is 'I am not interested'.

× As far as I remember, I start started to study science when I was elementary school student because I didn't like science what I.

✓ As far as I remember, I started to study science when I was an elementary school student because I didn't like science at that time.

The student mixed present and past ('start started'); use simple past 'started' for a past action. Also include the article 'an' before 'elementary school student' and correct the phrase 'what I' to 'at that time' for clarity.

× Especially I don't running out of the pizza because the space I I don't imagine outer space and the most of people don't know about the outer space and according to professor.

✓ In particular, I can't stop thinking about outer space; I can't imagine it, and most people don't know much about outer space, according to a professor.

This sentence had many issues: 'I don't running out of the pizza' is irrelevant and ungrammatical; replace with a relevant clause such as 'I can't stop thinking about outer space.' Use modal 'can't' + base verb. Remove repeated 'I'. Use 'most people' without 'the' and add 'much' to quantify knowledge. 'According to professor' needs an article: 'according to a professor.'

× I like Stirrup, the appointed outer spacer because I watch the film I watch.

✓ I like astronauts, the people who travel to space, because I watch films about them.

'Stirrup' and 'appointed outer spacer' are incorrect words; the correct term is 'astronauts' or 'space explorers.' The repetition 'I watch the film I watch' is redundant; revise to 'I watch films about them.' Clarify noun and use plural if referring generally.

× I often watch film, so I. How curious about the?

✓ I often watch films, so I am curious about them.

Incomplete sentence fragments and missing verbs: 'so I.' is incomplete and 'How curious about the?' is ungrammatical. Use complete clause 'so I am curious about them.' Use plural 'films' for general frequency.

× Actually I don't like watching science TV program because I'm not interested in science programs, but I often watch show the memories on Instagram.

✓ Actually I don't like watching science TV programs because I'm not interested in them, but I often watch memory videos on Instagram.

Use plural 'programs' for general reference and pronoun 'them' to avoid repetition. 'Show the memories' is awkward; 'memory videos' or 'stories' on Instagram is clearer. Ensure agreement between nouns and pronouns.

× I curious about the scientist.

✓ I am curious about scientists.

Missing auxiliary 'am' for the adjective 'curious' and singular 'the scientist' is incorrect when speaking generally; use plural 'scientists' without 'the' to express general interest.

× Yes, I sometimes. She Chinese people visit the Science Museum in Japan because Japan has similar science museums and which are famous all worlds.

✓ Yes, sometimes Chinese people visit science museums in Japan because Japan has similar museums that are famous worldwide.

The original contains sentence fragments ('Yes, I sometimes.'), wrong pronoun 'She', incorrect capitalization and articles. 'Science Museum' need not be capitalized unless a specific name; 'which are famous all worlds' should be 'that are famous worldwide.' Make 'Chinese people' the subject and use present simple 'visit' for habitual action.