Science— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Be more concise and maintain correct tense. Start with a clear topic sentence, then give one specific supporting detail. Avoid redundancy (e.g., "actually" and "back then").

例: Yes — I enjoyed science a lot in grade school because I was fascinated by life sciences. For example, I loved studying animals and plants and often won top marks in class.

提案: Good specific detail and clear timeline. Improve coherence by linking sentences and correcting small grammar (use past continuous or simple past consistently). Limit to 3–4 sentences.

例: I started learning about science in kindergarten when we visited the school garden to observe plants and insects. I often used a magnifying glass to examine different species, which sparked my interest in science.

提案: Answer directly and use precise vocabulary (biology studies life, not only plants). Add a linking phrase and a specific example to make it stronger.

例: Biology interests me most because it studies living things, especially plants. For example, I enjoyed learning about endemic Philippine species and observing local plants in nearby parks.

提案: This answer is incomplete and vague. Start with a clear topic sentence naming an activity, give one specific example of an experiment, and finish the thought. Use proper sentence endings.

例: I have mainly done hands-on experiments at school, which I found most interesting. For instance, I tested how light affects plant growth by growing seedlings under different light conditions and recording their height over two weeks.

提案: Be concise and correct phrasing. Give one reason why you liked the show and a brief specific detail. Correct grammar ("its title", "child-oriented").

例: Yes, I enjoy science programs. My favorite was a 1990s Filipino show called Senior Square because it featured simple lab demonstrations and explained scientific concepts to children.

提案: Avoid uncertain fillers like "maybe"; give a clear, general opinion and support it with a reason or example. Use more natural phrasing and correct collocations (e.g., "I don't really know" instead of "I actually do not have an idea").

例: I'm not sure, but I think many people visit science museums when they are curious about science. For example, families and students often go to museums for interactive exhibits and school trips.

× Yes I do, it is actually my favorite subject when I was in grade school.

✓ Yes, I do. It was actually my favorite subject when I was in grade school.

Mixed tense and sentence structure issue: The student uses present tense 'is' with a past time reference 'when I was in grade school.' Change 'is' to 'was' to match the past timeframe and separate into two sentences for clarity. Suggestion: keep verb tenses consistent with the time reference and use punctuation to separate independent clauses.

× I always ace my science classes back then and what's most interesting for me would be the life sciences.

✓ I always aced my science classes back then, and what interested me most was life sciences.

Subject-verb agreement and tense consistency (Grammar problem type 27 and 6): 'ace' is present but the time adverb 'back then' requires past tense 'aced.' 'What's most interesting for me would be' is awkward and mismatched in tense/modal use; change to past 'interested me most was.' Suggestion: match verb tense to the time frame and use direct past forms for preferences in the past.

× I started to learn about it when I was in kindergarten.

✓ I started learning about it when I was in kindergarten.

Present tense vs gerund usage (Grammar problem type 6/8): 'started to learn' is grammatically acceptable but 'started learning' is more natural and idiomatic. Suggestion: use 'started' + gerund for ongoing activities that began in the past.

× That time we would go at the garden to check out the plants and little insects.

✓ At that time we would go to the garden to look at the plants and small insects.

Preposition and word choice errors (Grammar problem type 11): Use 'to the garden' not 'at the garden.' 'Check out' is informal; 'look at' is clearer. 'Little insects' is better as 'small insects.' Suggestion: choose correct prepositions and more appropriate vocabulary for clarity.

× I would have a magnifying glass with me and take a look at the different species around.

✓ I would bring a magnifying glass and look at the different species around me.

Verb form and phrasing (Grammar problem type 8): 'have a magnifying glass with me' is wordy and 'take a look at' is informal; 'bring' and 'look at' with 'around me' is clearer. Suggestion: prefer concise verb phrases and correct collocations.

× And that made me aware about science.

✓ And that made me aware of science.

Incorrect use of preposition/adjective (Grammar problem type 13/11): 'aware about' is incorrect collocation; the correct preposition is 'aware of.' Suggestion: learn common adjective+preposition combinations (aware of, interested in).

× The most interesting for me would be biology, as it is the study of plants.

✓ The most interesting subject for me was biology, as it is the study of living organisms.

Third person singular and accuracy issue (Grammar problem type 2): 'would be biology' is awkward for stating preference; use past 'was' to match earlier past narrative. Also the definition 'study of plants' is inaccurate; biology is the study of living organisms—botany is the study of plants. Suggestion: use correct tense and accurate subject definitions.

× What I like about that subject is we get to talk about different plant species, especially the ones that are endemic in the Philippines.

✓ What I liked about that subject was that we got to talk about different plant species, especially those endemic to the Philippines.

Tense consistency (Grammar problem type 6): The student mixes present 'like' and 'get' with past context. Use past tense 'liked' and 'got.' Also 'endemic to' is the correct prepositional phrase. Suggestion: keep tense consistent with the past timeframe and use correct prepositions.

× We also get to look at the plants in the neighborhood, the nearby parks and the like.

✓ We also looked at plants in the neighborhood, in nearby parks, and similar places.

Adverb/phrase placement and tense (Grammar problem type 20/6): 'get to' should be past 'looked at' and 'the like' is informal; rephrase as 'and similar places.' Suggestion: avoid vague phrases and match tense to narration.

× It would generally be the experiment.

✓ Generally, it would be experiments.

Incorrect singular/plural and phrasing (Grammar problem type 21/1): 'the experiment' is too specific and singular; student likely means 'experiments' plural. Suggestion: use plural when speaking about activities done repeatedly and start sentence with adverb 'Generally' for fluency.

× I'm always fascinated by the scientific method because through that we are able to start with a theory and from there test it out through experiments.

✓ I was always fascinated by the scientific method because through it we were able to start with a theory and then test it through experiments.

Tense consistency (Grammar problem type 6): The student uses present 'I'm' while narrating past experiences. Change to past 'I was' and 'were able' to match. Replace 'that' with 'it' for clarity and simplify 'test it out through experiments' to 'test it through experiments.' Suggestion: maintain past tense for past experiences and use concise phrasing.

× An example would be experiments that would.

✓ For example, we conducted experiments to test our hypotheses.

Sentence structure error (Grammar problem type 26): The original sentence is incomplete and lacks an object or clause after 'would.' Provide a complete sentence such as 'we conducted experiments to test our hypotheses.' Suggestion: ensure each sentence has a clear subject and predicate and completes the thought.

× Yes definitely.

✓ Yes, definitely.

Punctuation/article error (Grammar problem type 22): Missing comma after 'Yes.' Suggestion: add appropriate punctuation for natural speech written form.

× My favorite is the Filipino Show back in the 90s.

✓ My favorite was a Filipino show back in the 90s.

Article and tense error (Grammar problem type 22/6): 'is' should be past 'was' for past time reference. 'the Filipino Show' implies a specific title; if general, use 'a Filipino show.' Suggestion: match tense and use correct articles for titles or general references.

× It's title is Senior Square is a child oriented show where it has it features laboratories and different particles that teach you science.

✓ Its title was Senior Square. It was a child-oriented show that featured laboratories and different segments that taught science.

Definite article and pronoun errors (Grammar problem type 17/12): 'It's' (it is) is used incorrectly instead of possessive 'its.' Run-on sentence and tense mismatch: use past tense 'was' and 'featured.' 'Particles' is incorrect word; likely 'segments' or 'parts.' 'Has it features' is ungrammatical. Suggestion: use correct possessive 'its,' avoid run-ons, choose appropriate nouns ('segments'), and keep tense consistent.

× Maybe I actually do not have an idea about this.

✓ Maybe I actually don't have an idea about that.

Tense/pronoun reference (Grammar problem type 6/12): 'about this' is acceptable but 'about that' fits better with the examiner's question; contraction 'don't' is more natural. Suggestion: use natural phrasing 'I don't have an idea about that' or 'I'm not sure about that.'

× To me, overall, my impression is any type of person would often visit science museums for as long as they are interested in this branch.

✓ Overall, my impression is that people often visit science museums as long as they are interested in the subject.

Incorrect use of quantifiers/pronominal phrasing (Grammar problem type 14): 'any type of person' is wordy; 'people' is simpler. 'For as long as they are interested in this branch' is wordy; 'as long as they are interested in the subject' is clearer. Also change present 'is' is acceptable here because it's a general statement. Suggestion: use concise quantifiers and simplify conditional phrases.