Sharing— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: 回答较自然但有冗余和语法小错。建议用一到两句直接回应，然后补充一到两句具体例子或原因，注意时态和搭配（e.g. “when I was young”而不是“when I was a young student”），避免重复“delicious foods”和“beverages”。可以用连接词如“because”或“so”更流畅。

例: Yes. My parents encouraged me to share when I was young. For example, my mother often asked me to share snacks and drinks with classmates so everyone could enjoy them and feel included.

提案: 内容明确但有语法和用词问题，句子略长且有冗余。建议第一句直接表述习惯，然后用具体例子和原因支持。注意时态和形容词/动词搭配（比如“I usually share books I’ve read recently”以及“make me feel happy”）。可使用连接词如“and”或“so”。

例: I usually share books I've recently read with friends. I also sometimes bring treats and drinks to share, because sharing nice food helps everyone feel happy and relaxed.

提案: 回答明确且有例子，但有些语法错误和表达不够简洁。建议第一句直接陈述观点，然后用一到两句说明原因和具体例子。修正动词形式（e.g. “it may be misused and cause harm to me”）。可以补充如何保护这些信息。

例: Personal information shouldn't be shared. For example, I never tell anyone my bank password or detailed medical records because they could be misused and cause financial or personal harm.

提案: 回答缺乏自然表达且有多处错误和不地道用法（如“stories layer”、“thrill them up”）。建议先说出具体要分享的东西，然后说明原因并举一两句感受或例子。使用更准确的词汇如“inspiring”或“thought-provoking”，并用连接词如“because”或“so”。

例: Yes. Recently I wanted to share a book I finished because its story was very inspiring and thought-provoking. I thought my friends would enjoy it and find it motivating too.

提案: 回答意思清楚但语法和词序有误。建议用一两句直接回答并补充原因或例子。修正表达为“my sister first”或“first of all I would tell my sister”并用正确时态（e.g. “since we were children”）。

例: I'd tell my sister first. We have been very close since childhood, so she is always the first person I want to share happy news with.

提案: 观点合理但表达有些笨拙和语法问题（如“I don't want let”应为“I don't want to let”）。建议先直接回答，再解释原因并简要说明对待坏消息的方式。可用连接词“because”或“so”。

例: I usually share good news with my friends because I don't want to worry them with my problems. If something serious happens, I might share it later when I'm ready or ask for their support.

× When I was a young student, my mom always told me that I should share my beverages and delicious foods with my best friends because the sharing would make me feel very happy and comfortable.

✓ When I was a young student, my mom always told me that I should share my beverages and delicious food with my best friends because sharing made me feel very happy and comfortable.

问题类型：现在时/过去时使用不当。原句中“would make me feel”与上下文过去时（"was", "told"）不一致，且“delicious foods”可用不可数名词“delicious food”。建议将结果用过去式“made”以与主句时态一致，并把“the sharing”简化为“sharing”。建议用法：叙述过去经历时，主句与从句的动词时态应一致；不可数名词 food 无需复数形式。

× In my daily lives, I usually share the books I read recently with others.

✓ In my daily life, I usually share the books I have read recently with others.

问题类型：现在时/时态与短语搭配错误。“daily lives”应为单数短语“daily life”。句中提到“recently”时，描述已读书籍更自然用现在完成时“have read recently”。建议：使用正确的固定搭配并注意完成时与时间状语搭配。

× Sometimes I will share some delicious treats and drinks with my best friends because I think these things always make me felt happy.

✓ Sometimes I share some delicious treats and drinks with my best friends because I think these things always make me feel happy.

问题类型：过去时使用错误与动词形式不当。原句用了“will”表示习惯时不自然，应使用一般现在时“share”。“make me felt”中“felt”是过去式，应为原形“feel”在使役结构中。建议：表达习惯动作用一般现在时；使役动词后用动词原形。

× I think personal information is not suitable for sharing. For example, I never share my bank password or medical records with my close friends because it may be misused by others and caused some damage to me.

✓ I think personal information is not suitable for sharing. For example, I never share my bank password or medical records with my close friends because they may be misused by others and cause some damage to me.

问题类型：介词/代词和动词形式使用错误。原句中“it may be misused”中的代词“it”不能指代复数的“password or medical records”，应使用“they”。此外“and caused some damage”时态不对，应与前半句并列使用动词原形“cause”。建议：代词要与其所指的名词在数一致；并列动词保持一致时态。

× Yes I do. I want to share the books I've read recently because the stories layer is very inspiring.

✓ Yes, I do. I want to share the books I've read recently because the stories' layer is very inspiring.

问题类型：现在时态与名词结构问题。原句“stories layer”表达不自然，若意指“故事层面”或“故事情节层次”，应加所有格或改为更自然表达。例如“the layers of the stories”或“the stories' layers”。建议：用所有格或复合结构使名词关系清晰；注意标点在“Yes, I do.”之后。

× I think sharing with the inspiration with others will also thrill them up.

✓ I think sharing the inspiration with others will also thrill them.

问题类型：句子结构与多余介词。“sharing with the inspiration with others”结构重复且不通顺，应为“sharing the inspiration with others”。“thrill them up”中“up”多余，通常说“thrill someone”或“excite someone”。建议：简化短语，删除多余介词与副词以保持自然表达。

× I would share the good news with my best family members, my sister at the first time because we have a deep friendship since we were little child.

✓ I would share the good news with my closest family member, my sister, first because we have been close since we were little children.

问题类型：句子结构与词序错误。原句中“my best family members”不自然，改为“my closest family member”；“at the first time”应为“first”；“we have a deep friendship since we were little child”时态和名词形式不当，使用现在完成时“have been close”更自然，且“child”需复数“children”。建议：使用自然的短语搭配，注意时间状语和自从从句的时态与名词复数形式。

× I usually share the good news about myself with my friends because I don't want let some bad news affect their mood and mental health.

✓ I usually share the good news about myself with my friends because I don't want to let any bad news affect their mood and mental health.

问题类型：动词不定式使用/现在时态问题。原句“don't want let”缺少不定式“to”，应为“don't want to let”。另外“some bad news”在此语境下更合适用“any bad news”。建议：注意动词短语结构（want to do）并选择合适的限定词。

× Sharing bad news will bring them some stress and make them worried about me.

✓ Sharing bad news will bring them some stress and make them worried about me.

问题类型：无错误（时态正确）。该句语法正确，无需修改。