Sharing— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: 回答要更清晰、語法正確並更精簡。開頭直接回答問題（Yes/No），接著用一兩句具體細節說明，例如母親如何教導、具體情境（如分享一個蘋果）。注意時態一致和人稱（don't → didn't，elder sister → older sister）。句子不要過長或重複。

例: Yes. My mother taught me to share from a young age because she wanted me to be kind. For example, if there was only one apple on the table, I had to cut it in half and give the other half to my older sister.

提案: 回答要有主句並用連接詞組織細節。說明具體例子（哪類學習資料、哪種食物）並解釋原因。避免語法錯誤和不完整片語，句子不超過五句。

例: I usually share my study materials, such as notes and practice tests, and tasty snacks with friends because it makes me happy to help others. However, I don't like to share money or very personal possessions.

提案: 回答需要更自然和語法正確。用一個主句說明總結（e.g. I don’t like sharing personal clothes），然後給出一兩個具體例子和原因（衛生、舒適）。避免重複與過多列舉。

例: I don't think personal clothes are suitable for sharing because of hygiene and comfort. For example, I wouldn't share my pajamas or underwear, and I usually avoid lending jeans or T‑shirts even to close family.

提案: 回答含糊且語法混亂，需要重組。直接說明最近分享的具體事物和情境（什麼、誰、何時、結果），並用正確時態。避免不清楚的詞彙（sliding materials、argued）。

例: Yes. Recently I shared my English revision notes with my older sister before her mock exam, and she was very happy because they helped her prepare.

提案: 結構基本正確但句子需更簡潔自然。先直接回答（My mother），然後給出一至二句具體原因（supports me, understands me），避免語法錯誤（she's always be → she's always been / she is always）。

例: I would tell my mother first because she is kind and understanding. She supports me like a friend, so I feel comfortable sharing any good news with her.

提案: 回答不夠連貫且有詞語使用錯誤。先總結所分享的新聞類型（e.g. personal experiences, travel plans, recommendations），然後舉清晰具體的例子。減少口頭填充詞（uh）並注意單複數與動詞搭配。

例: I usually share personal experiences with my friends, such as travel plans and fun discoveries. For example, if I try a delicious snack or find a nice song, I'll recommend it to them.

× Yes, my mother don't want me to be a selfish man who wants to be nice and wants me to be nice and kind.

✓ Yes, my mother doesn't want me to be a selfish man; she wants me to be nice and kind.

句中主语是第三人称单数（my mother），动词应使用第三人称单数形式。原句中使用了 don't（do not），这是第一/第二人称或复数的否定形式，应改为 doesn't（does not）。另外句子有重复和结构混乱，合并为两部分更清晰。建议记住：he/she/it 或单数名词在一般现在时用 does/doesn't。

× So if when I was a child and if on the desk there was only 1 apple I need to I needed to share half of it with my elder sister.

✓ So when I was a child, if there was only one apple on the desk, I needed to share half of it with my elder sister.

句子描述过去的习惯或情况，应使用过去时。原句混用了现在时（need）和过去时（was），应将 need 改为过去式 needed。并调整语序以符合英语习惯：if there was only one apple on the desk。建议在叙述过去习惯时整个句子保持过去时态一致。

× Like to share with others of my studying materials or some delicious foods because I like to share my happiness with them.

✓ I like to share my study materials or some delicious food with others because I like to share my happiness with them.

句中缺少主语，且使用了不自然的短语“of my studying materials”。应该补全主语 I，使用名词短语 study materials 或 studying materials（但 study materials 更常见），并将 foods 改为不可数时的 food 或具体复数形式 delicious foods（可选）。建议句子保持完整主语和自然搭配：share my study materials / delicious food。

× Not for my personal belongings such as money I don't like to share with them.

✓ As for my personal belongings, such as money, I don't like to share them.

原句中代词指代不清且语序不自然。money 作不可数名词，一般用 share money 或不加 them；若需要代词，应把 them 放在动词后并确保先说明复数名词（personal belongings）。因此将句子重构为 As for... I don't like to share them。建议先明确指代对象再使用代词。

× I think my own clothes, including my dress dresses, my jeans, my T-shirts, all my pajamas, I think they are really don't suitable for share with others, even if my elder sister.

✓ I think my own clothes, such as my dresses, jeans, T-shirts, and pajamas, are really not suitable to share with others, even my elder sister.

原句中有量词和搭配错误："dress dresses" 重复，且 don't suitable 用法错误；should be not suitable。动词不定式 to share 更合适。句子也需要去掉多余的逗号并整理并列项。建议使用 such as 来列举并用 are not suitable to share。

× Recently I saw my sliding materials.

✓ Recently I looked at my study materials.

原句 sliding materials 可能是错误单词，应为 study materials（学习资料）。saw 用法虽可但与 look at 更符合“查看资料”的语境；两者为一般过去时，近期已发生的动作可用 recently + 过去时，保持时态一致。建议用 look at / went through my study materials 或简单的 I reviewed my study materials (过去式)。

× Next night an elder sister argued my English pre exams on materials to her and she is very happy.

✓ The next night I discussed my English pre-exam materials with my elder sister, and she was very happy.

原句中人称、时态和动词用法混乱：argued 不合适，应该用 discuss；"to her" 应为 with her。时态与 previous recently 保持过去时，was 更符合。建议使用 discuss my ... materials with her 并保持过去时态一致。

× Oh, my mother, she's always be kind and very friendly, like a friend and she can understand me.

✓ Oh, my mother; she's always kind and very friendly, like a friend, and she can understand me.

原句用了 she's always be，这里不需要 be 动词的两次形式。正确为 she's always kind（she is always kind）。保持第三人称单数形式并去掉多余的 be。建议注意缩写后的动词形式只保留一次。

× My everything is very happy to share with her.

✓ I am happy to share everything with her.

原句语序和用词错误：My everything 不自然，应为 everything（或 my things），并且应该用主语 I。Also 情感动词用 I am happy to share...。建议把句子主语改为 I 并调整宾语位置：share everything with her。

× Starting shower with my friends, uh, some travel things, uh, for example, if I taste a delicious snacks or listen on some sweet songs, I will share it share them with my friends.

✓ I share things like taking showers with my friends, travel experiences, for example, if I taste a delicious snack or hear a sweet song, I will share it with my friends.

原句有多处介词和搭配错误：start shower 不自然，应为 take a shower；listen on incorrect, 应为 hear/listen to，但 hear 更适合“听到某歌”；a delicious snacks 数词与名词不一致，应该是 a delicious snack 或 delicious snacks。并且“share it share them”重复。建议按项目列举并使用正确搭配：take a shower, travel experiences, taste a delicious snack, hear a sweet song，并注意单复数和动词短语搭配。