Sharing— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Improve grammar, pronunciation and clarity. Use a clear topic sentence, correct plural/singular forms, and concise supporting detail. Limit to 2–3 sentences and use linking words like “for example” or “especially.”

例: Yes. My parents encouraged me to share with others when I was a child. For example, I often lent books and stationery such as pencils and erasers to my close friends.

提案: Clarify meaning and correct word choice. Use specific examples and concise structure. Avoid unclear verbs (“thriving”) and unfinished sentences. Use linking words like “also” and “for example.”

例: I like to share food with my close friends, for example, I often split appetizers or desserts when we eat out. I also post photos and simple recipes on social media to inspire friends and keep a record of dishes I try.

提案: Focus on clear and grammatically correct sentences. Use specific reasons and a brief example. Correct verb forms and avoid unfinished phrases. Keep to 1–2 sentences with linking word “because.”

例: I think sensitive personal information should not be shared because passwords, bank details or medical records can be misused. For example, I would never tell my online passwords to anyone.

提案: Make tense and verb forms consistent and avoid filler words. Provide one clear topic sentence then a brief supporting detail with linking words like “so” or “which.”

例: Yes. Last week I shared a cup of noodles with a colleague at the office, and we decided to invent a new recipe together, which was a fun way to get to know each other better.

提案: Use correct verb forms and clearer phrasing. Start with a topic sentence, then give a specific reason. Correct errors like “in college” and use linking words such as “because.”

例: I would share good news with my parents, especially my mother, because she always supports and encourages me. She motivates me to keep improving, so I like to celebrate with her first.

提案: This answer is generally good but can be slightly tightened. Use one clear topic sentence and one supporting detail with linking words like “for example.” Avoid redundant phrases like “this topic and pop culture.”

例: I usually share entertainment news with my close friends on social media. For example, we have a small group where we post updates about celebrities, new films and TV shows because we all enjoy discussing pop culture.

× Yes, my parent often encourage me to share everything with my friends, especially the books and equipments like pencil or eraser to my close.

✓ Yes, my parents often encouraged me to share everything with my friends, especially books and equipment like pencils or an eraser with my close friends.

Errors: 'parent' should be plural 'parents' to match context; 'encourage' should be past tense 'encouraged' to match 'when you were a child'; 'the books and equipments' contains unnecessary definite article and 'equipments' is incorrect plural — 'equipment' is uncountable; 'pencil or eraser' should be plural or use an article for singular; 'to my close' is incomplete and should be 'with my close friends'. Suggestion: make subject plural, match verb tense to past, use uncountable 'equipment' or correct countable nouns, and complete the phrase referring to people.'},{