Bike— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Ответьте прямо и избегайте повторения «when I was a child» и «in childhood». Выражение «possess this kind of vehicle» звучит слишком формально и неестественно: лучше сказать «I don’t have a bike now». После «time» используйте герундий («time to ride» или «time for cycling»). Добавьте конкретную деталь, например, где вы катались или что вам нравилось в поездках.

例: Yes, I had a bike when I was a child, and I really enjoyed riding it around my neighborhood. I don’t have one now because I rarely have time to cycle.

提案: Сформулируйте ответ полностью: сейчас он обрывается, а причина про состояние дорог не закончена. Сократите слова-паразиты («uh», «you know») и используйте более естественное выражение «the cold climate» вместо «the climate condition». Уточните, как именно погода и дороги влияют на популярность велосипедов; при необходимости добавьте связку «also» или «as a result».

例: I don’t think bikes are very popular in Russia, especially in winter. The weather is often cold, and some roads aren’t very suitable for cycling. As a result, many people prefer to use public transport.

× I don't have time actually try the bike.

✓ I don't have time to actually ride a bike.

After the expression do not have time, use an infinitive with to. The original sentence is missing to before try. Ride is also the more appropriate verb for using a bike.

× The weather is quite cold and 2nd and the road situation is also.

✓ The weather is quite cold, and the road conditions are also poor.

The original sentence is incomplete because also needs a complement stating what is true about the road situation. Complete the thought with a description such as poor. Avoid using 2nd here unless you are listing a second point; a natural transition is and.