Bike— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: The answer is difficult to understand and does not clearly answer the question. Start with a direct response, such as “Yes, I did.” Use past tense for childhood events (for example, “I had” and “I was”), and explain who gave you the bike or how you used it. Finish the incomplete thought about going to school. Aim for two or three clear sentences.

例: Yes, I had a bike when I was about ten. Someone in my family gave it to me, and I used it to get to school. I enjoyed riding it because it was convenient.

提案: Your answer mentions children, bikes, and motorcycles, but the main idea is unclear. Give a direct opinion first, then explain who uses bikes and for what purpose. Use clear linking words such as “especially” and “while” to compare bikes with motorcycles. Avoid repeating words while searching for an idea.

例: Yes, bikes are quite popular in my country, especially among children. They often ride them around their neighborhoods or use them for short trips. Adults are more likely to use motorcycles, while children usually prefer bicycles.

× Because I have a bike when I have a child

✓ I had a bike when I was a child.

The question asks about your childhood, so use the past tense. Use had instead of have, and was instead of have, to describe a past state.

× my body give me

✓ My body gave me

The answer refers to a past time, so give should be changed to its past-tense form, gave. The phrase still needs an object to be a complete thought; add what your body gave you if you can clarify the intended meaning.

× Children on my age, usually.

✓ Children my age usually...

Do not use on before my age in this expression. English speakers say children my age. The original is also incomplete, so add a verb and finish the thought.