Bike— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Answer directly, then give one or two clear details. Correct the word order in “bought me for it” to “bought it for me,” and say “every Sunday” rather than “on every Sunday.” You can also avoid the long run-on sentence by separating the details.

例: Yes, I did. My father bought me a pink bike for my seventh birthday, and I used to ride it every Sunday.

提案: Your answer is direct and well supported, with a clear reason. Improve the phrasing “on almost every street or neighborhood”: use “on almost every street and in almost every neighborhood.” You could also specify which type of bike is especially common among young people.

例: Yes, I think bicycles and motorbikes are very popular in India. You can see them on almost every street and in almost every neighborhood. Motorbikes are especially common among young people because they are affordable and convenient for short trips.

× Yes I did, my father had bought me for it on my 7th birthday which was pink in colour and I used to ride it on every Sunday.

✓ Yes, I did. My father had bought it for me on my 7th birthday. It was pink, and I used to ride it every Sunday.

The object pronoun it should come after bought, and me should identify the person receiving the bike: bought it for me. Avoid placing me before for it, which gives the sentence the wrong meaning.

× Yes I did, my father had bought me for it on my 7th birthday which was pink in colour and I used to ride it on every Sunday.

✓ Yes, I did. My father had bought it for me on my 7th birthday. It was pink, and I used to ride it every Sunday.

Do not use the preposition on before every Sunday. Use every Sunday by itself to describe how often the action happened. On my 7th birthday is correctly used to refer to the specific day.

× Yes I did, my father had bought me for it on my 7th birthday which was pink in colour and I used to ride it on every Sunday.

✓ Yes, I did. My father had bought it for me on my 7th birthday. It was pink, and I used to ride it every Sunday.

The original joins independent clauses with only a comma, creating a comma splice. Also, the clause which was pink is placed after birthday, making its reference unclear. Use separate sentences to make the relationship clear.