Bike— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: 質問に「Yes, I did.」と直接答えられています。次に、自転車を誰が買ったのかを自然な文で説明しましょう。「which could be by my father」は意味が伝わりにくいため、「which was bought by my father」などが使えます。また、言い直しや「あの」を減らし、誕生日プレゼントについての情報を整理して話すと、より明確になります。

例: Yes, I did. My parents gave me a bike for my first birthday, and I think my father chose it. I loved riding it as a child.

提案: 「Yes, I do.」の後に「My country is Japan」と続けるのではなく、「In Japan, ...」で文を始めましょう。朝に自転車を使う人を見かけるという具体例はありますが、最後の文が途中で終わっているため、通勤や通学など、何のために使っているのかを説明すると答えがまとまります。言いよどみを減らし、理由や例を一つ加えると自然です。

例: Yes, bikes are quite popular in Japan. In the mornings, I often see people riding them to work or school. They are a convenient way to get around, especially for short distances.

× I I had a bike, uh, which, which could be by my father.

✓ I had a bike that was given to me by my father.

The phrase could be by my father does not form a complete passive construction because be must be followed by a past participle. Use was given to describe who gave you the bike. In speaking, avoid repeating words when restarting a sentence.

× Yes, I do in in my country is Japan.

✓ Yes, I do. My country is Japan.

The words in my country do not form a complete clause with is Japan. Use the subject My country to make a complete sentence. The repeated in is a speech disfluency, not a grammar error by itself.

× Maybe they are uh, they are using bikes for.

✓ Maybe they are using bikes for transportation.

The preposition for needs an object in this sentence, but the original ends before one is provided. Add a suitable noun, such as transportation, to complete the thought.