Bike— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: 先直接回答问题，再补充一两条具体信息。表达“这是父母送的生日礼物”时，可说 “It was a birthday present from my parents”，避免重复使用 gift。注意减少重复和填充词，并补全最后一句，例如说明你常骑它做什么。

例: Yes, I had a bike when I was a child. It was a birthday present from my parents, and I was really excited to get it. I often rode it around my neighborhood after school.

提案: 开头直接表达观点，并使用正确词汇：这里应说 “bikes” 或 “shared bikes”，而不是 “buys” 或 “share buys”。删去重复的 because，用连接词组织理由；可以具体说明共享单车如何方便通勤或锻炼。注意结束句子，不要在 and 后中断。

例: Yes, I think bikes are very popular in China, especially shared bikes. You can see them all over the streets, and they’re convenient for short trips. I sometimes ride one to work, which also gives me a bit of exercise.

× I had a bike when I was a child on Dubai.

✓ I had a bike when I was a child in Dubai.

表示人在某个城市时，通常用介词“in”，而不是“on”。可以记住：表达“在某个城市”时使用“in”，例如“in Dubai”。

× Dubai is the birthday gift that my parents give me as a birthday gift.

✓ It was a birthday gift that my parents gave me.

这句话描述的是童年时收到自行车的经历，应使用过去时。“is”应改为“was”，“give”应改为“gave”。另外，用“It”指代前文提到的自行车更合适。讲述过去的经历时，要确保相关动词都使用过去时。

× In China there are a lot of share buys on the street.

✓ In China, there are a lot of shared bikes on the street.

“共享单车”可表达为“shared bikes”。这里“shared”作定语修饰“bikes”，应使用过去分词形式，而不是动词原形“share”。

× The buys are is very popular in my country.

✓ Bikes are very popular in my country.

主语“bikes”是复数，谓语应使用“are”。原句中的“are is”重复使用了两个谓语形式。写句子时，注意复数主语搭配“are”，并避免重复谓语。