Bike— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Answer directly using the past tense: “Yes, I did.” Avoid repeating that you were 12, and replace “roam around” with a more natural phrase such as “ride around.” The answer is cut off, so finish your point about the second bike or omit it. Keep the response to a few clear sentences and use a linking phrase such as “I remember that…”

例: Yes, I did. I got my first bike when I was about 12. It was an Adidas bike, and I used to ride it around Whitefield, a neighborhood in Bangalore. I have fond memories of exploring the area on it.

提案: Give a clear opinion, then support it with one or two relevant reasons. Correct the grammar in “There are there have been” and avoid saying that you opened the showrooms; you could say “more showrooms have opened.” Use “rising” rather than “inclining” for prices, and complete the thought about who buys bikes. Reduce fillers and repetition.

例: Yes, bikes are very popular in India. More showrooms have opened in recent years, and many people rely on motorcycles for commuting because they are convenient in busy cities. Although prices are rising, bikes remain an affordable option for many families.

× Yes, I do had a bike when I was 12.

✓ Yes, I had a bike when I was 12.

The question asks about a past experience, so use the simple past. Do cannot be combined with the past-tense verb had in this affirmative sentence. Use had by itself.

× Bikes are pretty much popular in my country.

✓ Bikes are quite popular in my country.

Pretty much usually means almost or largely, and it does not naturally modify popular in this sentence. Use quite to mean fairly or very popular.

× There are there have been a lot of new showrooms which I have opened in India.

✓ There have been a lot of new showrooms which I have opened in India.

The sentence starts with two competing structures: there are and there have been. Use only one. Here, there have been correctly introduces the showrooms and fits the present-perfect tense.