Bike— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Your answer is clear and directly addresses the question, but it is repetitive and too brief to develop the conversation. Add one specific detail, such as what you used the bike for or how you felt about it.

例: Yes, I did. I had a small red bike, and I often rode it around my neighborhood with my friends after school.

提案: Give a clear answer to the question first, then explain the change with a complete sentence. Remove filler words such as “umm,” use natural phrasing like “for leisure,” and finish your final thought instead of ending with “the availability of.” Include a specific reason or comparison.

例: They are less popular than they used to be, especially in cities. In the past, children often rode bikes in the evenings for fun, but now many people rely on public transport because it is convenient and widely available.

× Bikes were once popular as kids love riding a bicycle during the evening as a leisure time.

✓ Bikes were once popular because kids loved riding bicycles in the evenings for leisure.

The sentence describes a past period, so the present-tense verb 'love' should be changed to the past-tense verb 'loved' to match 'were.' Use 'for leisure' rather than 'as a leisure time' when describing an activity done for enjoyment.

× Bikes were once popular as kids love riding a bicycle during the evening as a leisure time.

✓ Bikes were once popular because kids loved riding bicycles in the evenings for leisure.

'Leisure' is generally used without an article in the expression 'for leisure.' Also, 'a leisure time' is not the appropriate phrase here; 'a leisure activity' would be grammatical, but 'for leisure' is more natural.

× ...and then it became less popular due to the advancement of the public transport or the availability of.

✓ ...and then they became less popular due to the development of public transport and its increased availability.

The pronoun 'it' does not agree with the plural noun 'bikes.' Use 'they' to refer to the bikes. Alternatively, you could make the activity the subject: 'Bike riding then became less popular.' The final phrase is incomplete; specify what became more available, such as public transport.

× ...due to the advancement of the public transport...

✓ ...due to the development of public transport...

'Public transport' refers to a general service here, so it normally does not take the definite article 'the.' Use 'the' only when referring to a specific public transport system already identified.