Bike— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Answer directly, then give the key details in a clear sequence. Use the past tense accurately and say “when I was eight” rather than “when I in my eighth birthday.” Check the pronunciation of “bike,” as the transcript suggests it may have sounded like “pie.” Avoid repeating words and fillers so your answer is easier to understand.

例: Yes, I had a bike when I was a child. It was a gift from my father for my eighth birthday, and I loved riding it.

提案: State your opinion clearly, then explain the contrast using accurate grammar and specific examples. For example, say “my country is becoming more developed” and explain that people may choose cars or motorbikes instead. Use “bicycles” or “bikes” consistently, and avoid fillers and repeated words.

例: I don’t think bicycles are as popular as they used to be. As my country has become more developed, many people prefer motorbikes or cars because they are faster and more convenient for longer journeys.

× I had a pie when I was try is the the gift for my father when I in my uh 8th birthday Yes I love it so much.

✓ I had a bike when I was a child. It was a gift from my father on my eighth birthday. Yes, I loved it so much.

The answer describes a childhood experience, so use past-tense verbs such as was and loved. The phrase when I in is missing the past-tense verb was. I interpreted pie and the unclear phrase after it as bike and a childhood reference based on the question; use the accurate wording you intended.

× my country are become a development

✓ my country is becoming more developed

Country is singular, so it takes is, not are. Make sure the verb agrees with its subject: a singular subject takes is.

× my country are become a development

✓ my country is becoming more developed

To describe a change happening now, use the present progressive form is becoming. Developed is the adjective needed to describe the country; development is a noun.

× the motorbike and car and some transportation

✓ motorbikes, cars, and other forms of transportation

The answer refers to multiple motorbikes and cars, so use plural nouns. Transportation is generally uncountable in this meaning, so say other forms of transportation rather than some transportation when listing types.

× the motorbike and car and some transportation appear more than Mike

✓ motorbikes, cars, and other forms of transportation are more common than bikes

The comparison should be between types of transportation and bikes. Use than bikes to make the comparison clear, rather than comparing transportation with Mike. The word more common expresses the likely intended meaning.