Bike— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Сначала ответьте прямо, а затем объясните, почему велосипед вам не нравился. Используйте естественные выражения: «I fell off my bike» и «I hurt myself». Уберите повтор «an ache» и неясную фразу «I would achieve some new»; добавьте конкретную деталь о падении или о том, как вы сейчас относитесь к велосипедам.

例: Yes, I did. I had a bike when I was a child, but I didn’t enjoy riding it very much because I fell off and hurt myself once. After that, I felt nervous about cycling.

提案: Избегайте повтора «I think I reckon» и заполнителя «um». Вместо неестественных выражений «because of ecologic» и «suspicious problem with air» скажите «because they are environmentally friendly» и «air pollution». Объясните, почему велосипеды популярны, и уточните, что ими недорого пользоваться: сами велосипеды не всегда бесплатны.

例: Yes, I think bikes are quite popular in my country. They’re an affordable way to get around, and they don’t produce air pollution. Many people also use them for short trips when traffic is heavy.

× I had a bike when I was a child but in my opinion it was horrible because I had a ache, an ache because of bike.

✓ I had a bike when I was a child, but in my opinion it was horrible because I had an ache, an ache because of the bike.

Use an before ache because the word begins with a vowel sound. Use the before bike when referring to the specific bike already mentioned.

× I fell from bike and now I guess that I would achieve some new.

✓ I fell off my bike, and now I guess that I would achieve some new.

Use fall off when describing falling from a bicycle. From is not the natural preposition in this context.

× I fell from bike and now I guess that I would achieve some new.

✓ I fell from bike and now I guess that I would achieve something new.

Some needs a noun after it in this construction. Use something before the adjective new when referring to an unspecified thing.

× Yes, I think I reckon that bikes are popular in my country because of ecologic and some suspicious um problem with air.

✓ Yes, I think I reckon that bikes are popular in my country because of ecological issues and some problems with air quality.

Because of must be followed by a noun or noun phrase. Ecologic is an adjective and cannot stand alone here, so use a noun phrase such as ecological issues.

× So also people like to have a bike because if it's free and cheap.

✓ Also, people like to have a bike because if it's free and cheap.

Also is more naturally placed at the beginning of the clause, followed by a comma, rather than between So and the subject.

× So also people like to have a bike because if it's free and cheap.

✓ So also people like to have a bike because it's free and cheap.

Because already introduces the reason. Do not add if, which introduces a condition, unless the meaning is conditional.