Bike— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Сразу ответьте на вопрос, затем добавьте конкретную деталь о велосипеде или воспоминании. Избегайте повторения «red color»: естественнее сказать «it was small and red». Используйте прошедшее время («it was»), а вместо неестественного «it was enjoying» скажите, что велосипед приносил вам радость или что вам нравилось на нём кататься. Завершите мысль ясным предложением.

例: Yes, I had a small red bike when I was a child. My parents gave it to me for my seventh birthday, and I loved riding it around our neighborhood. It was one of my favorite presents.

提案: Ответ в целом понятен и содержит уместное противопоставление. Сократите паузы и повторы («use them for», «regular regularly»), а также точнее сформулируйте сравнение: например, что велосипеды не так распространены для ежедневных поездок, как автомобили или общественный транспорт. Можно добавить конкретную причину или пример, чтобы развить ответ.

例: Yes, bikes are quite popular in my country, especially among children and teenagers. People often ride them for exercise or short trips. However, they are less common than cars and public transport for daily commuting, particularly in larger cities.

× So this bike was um a small and red color and have a red color.

✓ So, this bike was small and red, and it had a red color.

Small and red are adjectives describing the bike, so they should follow was directly. The phrase a small and red color incorrectly uses color as the thing being described. Use a small, red bike or say the bike was small and red.

× So this bike was um a small and red color and have a red color.

✓ So, this bike was small and red, and it had a red color.

The speaker is describing a bike from childhood, so the verb should be in the past tense. Have changes to had.

× So for me from childhood it was enjoying

✓ For me, it was enjoyable throughout my childhood.

Enjoying describes someone who is experiencing pleasure, but the speaker means that the bike or the experience was pleasant. Use the adjective enjoyable to express this meaning.

× I wouldn't say that most people use them for, uh, use them regular regularly as cars and public transport, um, more common.

✓ I wouldn't say that most people use them as regularly as they use cars or public transport; cars and public transport are more common.

Regularly is the adverb needed to describe how often people use bikes. Regular is an adjective, so it cannot modify the verb use. Avoid repeating use them, and place regularly before the comparison.

× I wouldn't say that most people use them for, uh, use them regular regularly as cars and public transport, um, more common.

✓ I wouldn't say that most people use them as regularly as they use cars or public transport; cars and public transport are more common.

The original comparison is incomplete: as cars and public transport does not provide a matching comparison of how often people use each form of transport. Use as regularly as they use to compare frequency, and make cars and public transport the subject of the separate clause about being more common.