Bike— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Ответьте прямо, затем кратко объясните, когда и почему вы получили велосипед. Исправьте выражение “my parents present for me”: естественнее сказать “a birthday present from my parents”. Последнее предложение повторяет идею о мечте и звучит неестественно; используйте Past Perfect (“I had wanted one for a long time”) или замените его конкретной деталью о велосипеде.

例: Yes, I did. My parents gave me a blue bike for my birthday, and I was thrilled because I had wanted one for a long time. I rode it around our neighborhood almost every day.

提案: Сформулируйте мнение без колебаний и объясните его конкретными причинами. Вместо общего и неестественного “our people don't really appreciate bikes” укажите, например, что многие предпочитают автомобили или общественный транспорт. Исправьте грамматику: говорят “in bad weather”, без артикля. Используйте связку “because” или “also”, чтобы логично объединить причины.

例: I wouldn’t say bikes are very popular in my country. Many people prefer driving or taking public transport, especially because the weather can be rainy and unpleasant. However, cycling is becoming more common in parks and dedicated bike lanes.

× Probably not really popular because uh bikes aren't convenient um in a bad weather and also our people don't really appreciate bikes.

✓ Probably not really popular because bikes aren't convenient in bad weather, and our people don't really appreciate bikes.

Weather is an uncountable noun when referring to weather conditions in general, so it does not take the indefinite article a. Say in bad weather, not in a bad weather.