Bike— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Répondez directement, puis ajoutez un détail personnel concret. Votre réponse est claire et pertinente, mais « as I was growing up » et « when I was around 7 or 8 years old » expriment tous deux une idée temporelle ; vous pouvez alléger la phrase et préciser, par exemple, où vous aimiez faire du vélo.

例: Yes, I did. I loved cycling as a child, and my parents bought me a small bike when I was about seven. I used to ride it around our neighborhood.

提案: Commencez par une réponse directe, puis expliquez brièvement les usages du vélo avec des exemples précis. Remplacez « I would agree to this » par une formulation naturelle comme « Yes, definitely ». Évitez les répétitions (« very, very »), construisez correctement l’idée des déplacements domicile-travail et terminez votre dernière phrase : « pay attention to the » est inachevé.

例: Yes, definitely. Bikes are popular in my country, both for recreation and for commuting to work. They’re also a good way to stay active, and in busy cities they can be more convenient than driving.

× Bikes are very popular in my country, not only as a leisure activity but also as umm, someone who would travel to their office using their bicycle.

✓ Bikes are very popular in my country, not only as a leisure activity but also as a means of travelling to work.

The original sentence does not use parallel structures: 'as a leisure activity' is followed by 'as someone who would travel,' which incorrectly describes a bike as a person. Use matching noun phrases, such as 'as a leisure activity' and 'as a means of travelling to work.'

× Also, it is very useful if someone wants to pay attention to the.

✓ Also, it is very useful for someone who wants to pay attention to their surroundings.

The sentence ends with 'the,' but the definite article must come before a noun, and no noun follows it. The sentence is incomplete as transcribed. Adding 'their surroundings' gives the clause a complete and natural ending; use the intended noun if the recording contains a different one.