Bike— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Answer directly and clearly distinguish between your childhood bike and the bike you own now. Use the past tense for childhood experiences ("had") and the correct structure "I like going..." The phrase "doing some white outside" is unclear, so replace it with a specific activity, such as riding around your neighborhood. Avoid the vague ending and aim for two or three clear sentences.

例: Yes, I had a bike when I was a child, and I have a new one now. I enjoy riding outdoors, especially around my neighborhood on weekends.

提案: Give a clear opinion and support it with a specific reason or comparison. Avoid fillers such as "uh" and the redundant phrase "now nowadays." Use the plural form in "no one uses," and avoid saying that nobody uses regular bikes unless you are certain; a more balanced comparison will sound more natural.

例: I think traditional bikes are less popular than they used to be. Many people prefer cars or electric bikes because they are more convenient for longer journeys, although some people still ride regular bikes for exercise.

× Yeah, I actually have a bike when I was child and until now I have a new one because I really like uh go outside and doing some white outside.

✓ Yeah, I actually had a bike when I was a child, and I have a new one now because I really like, uh, going outside and doing some white outside.

Use had, the past tense of have, because the bike belongs to a period in the past indicated by when I was a child. The phrase have a new one can remain in the present because it describes the current situation.

× Yeah, I actually have a bike when I was child and until now I have a new one because I really like uh go outside and doing some white outside.

✓ Yeah, I actually had a bike when I was a child, and I have a new one now because I really like, uh, going outside and doing some white outside.

Use the indefinite article a before the singular countable noun child. In English, a singular countable noun generally needs an article or another determiner.

× I really like uh go outside and doing some white outside.

✓ I really like, uh, going outside and doing some white outside.

After like, a gerund is appropriate. Use going to match doing and keep the two activities in a parallel form.

× Usually people just use a car or you know electric bike.

✓ Usually people just use a car or, you know, an electric bike.

Add the indefinite article an before the singular countable noun phrase electric bike. Use an because electric begins with a vowel sound.

× Nowadays no one use the classic bike anymore.

✓ Nowadays no one uses the classic bike anymore.

No one is grammatically singular, so the present-tense verb needs the third-person singular ending -s: uses.

× So yeah, that's my childhood a little bit.

✓ So, yeah, that was a little bit about my childhood.

The original wording does not clearly connect that's with my childhood. Use that was a little bit about my childhood to form a clear sentence and express that the answer gave some information about the speaker's childhood.