Bike— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: 回答能直接回应问题，但“about around”重复且不自然；“It was about eleven years old”会被理解为自行车有十一年历史，而不是你当时的年龄。建议明确说明你几岁时有了第一辆自行车，并补充一个简短细节，例如颜色或用途。

例: Yes, I got my first bike when I was about eleven. It was bright red, and I used to ride it around my neighborhood.

提案: 观点明确，但前两句重复表达“自行车很受欢迎”。“keys”“bags to step”等词语不符合语境，导致后面的意思难以理解；同时“many of students riding”缺少正确的主谓结构。建议用一个清晰的理由或观察来支持观点，例如孩子在社区骑车，或学生骑车上学。

例: Yes, bikes are quite popular in my country. I often see children riding them around my neighborhood, and many students cycle to school because it’s convenient and affordable.

× It was about around eleven years old.

✓ I was about eleven years old when I got my first bike.

这里用“It”会让人理解为自行车有十一年车龄；结合上下文，你想表达的应是自己当时大约十一岁，所以应使用“I”。另外，“about”和“around”都表示“大约”，同时使用显得重复，保留一个即可。

× And of course, many of students riding bags to step.

✓ And of course, many students ride bikes to school.

“many of”后面通常要接“the/these/those”等限定词，例如“many of the students”；若后面直接接复数名词，应说“many students”。这里表达一般情况，用“many students”更自然。

× And of course, many of students riding bags to step.

✓ And of course, many students ride bikes to school.

原句中的“riding”是非谓语形式，句子缺少能够独立作谓语的动词，因此是不完整的句子。表达一般事实时，可使用一般现在时谓语“ride”。