Bike— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: 先直接回答自己小时候有没有自行车，再补充一两个具体细节，例如是谁买的、常在哪里骑或它带给你的感受。原回答中的“a back”“it doesn't mean to to have a back”和“we first hand”等表达不清楚，建议使用简单、准确的词句；避免重复，并用 because 或 for example 衔接理由和例子。

例: Yes, I did. My parents bought me a small bike when I was about seven, and I used to ride it around our neighborhood. It helped me become more independent, and I have fond memories of it.

提案: 开头要明确回答自行车在你们国家是否流行，并区分普通自行车和电动自行车。原回答的“at my age”“electricity bag”和“more faster”等表达不准确或不自然；可改用“among people my age”“electric bikes”和“faster”。接着说明一个具体原因或例子，并删去重复、含糊的结尾。

例: Yes, bikes are still quite popular in my country, especially among students and people who live close to work. However, electric bikes have become more common because they are faster and require less effort. In my city, I often see people using them for their daily commute.

× because it doesn't mean to to have a back.

✓ because it doesn't mean to have a bike.

“to”重复出现，造成句子结构错误。应删除多余的一个“to”。

× It also means that we first hand, we own something and it's valuable.

✓ It also means that we own something firsthand and that it's valuable.

原句中“that we first hand”和“we own something”结构混杂，导致从句不完整且表达不清。可将“firsthand”放在“own something”之后，并用“and that”连接两个并列内容。

× more electric electricity bag come out

✓ more electric bikes are coming out

这里说的是越来越多的电动自行车，因此可数名词“bike”应使用复数“bikes”。

× more electric electricity bag come out

✓ more electric bikes are coming out

主语“bikes”是复数，谓语应与其保持一致。这里用“are coming out”与复数主语搭配。

× more faster, more cool

✓ faster and cooler

“faster”和“cooler”本身已经是比较级，前面不应再加“more”。

× Well, just biking is at our age.

✓ Well, biking is popular among people our age.

原句的“is at our age”无法完整表达“在我们这个年龄段很受欢迎”的意思，句子结构不完整。可用“popular among people our age”表达“在我们这个年龄段的人中很受欢迎”。