Bike— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: 回答切题，也提供了父亲教你骑车、和朋友骑车等细节，但语法和表达不够自然。注意过去时态：用“had / bought / practised / rode”；“a bike buying from my dad”应改为“a bike my dad bought for me”。避免把多个想法用 and 连成一个长句，并用一两个连接词组织细节。

例: Yes, I did. I had a pink bike that my dad bought for me, and he helped me learn how to ride it. Later, I often rode it with my friends, which made my childhood really enjoyable.

提案: 答案没有完整回应现在自行车是否受欢迎，而且最后一句被截断。开头“This issue should be discussed over different periods of time”过于生硬；建议直接表明过去和现在的情况，再给出原因或例子。注意语法：过去用“were popular”，现在用“are”；“every children”应为“every child”，“go to the job”应为“go to work”。

例: Bikes were more popular in my country 10 or 20 years ago, when many people used them to get to work. These days, fewer people commute by bike because cars and public transport are more common. However, bikes are still popular for exercise and short trips.

× Uh, definitely yes. I have a pink bike buying from my dad and I practiced with him and I learned a lot of skills to ride a bike and I also ride bikes with my friends and we had a very beautiful childhood.

✓ Uh, definitely yes. I had a pink bike bought by my dad, and I practiced with him and learned a lot of skills for riding a bike. I also rode bikes with my friends, and we had a very beautiful childhood.

问题是在描述童年经历时，部分动词用了现在时。应使用过去时：have 改为 had，ride 改为 rode。谈论过去发生的事情时，要保持相关动词的时态一致。

× I have a pink bike buying from my dad.

✓ I had a pink bike bought by my dad.

这里 buying 不能正确修饰 bike。要表达“由爸爸买的自行车”，应使用过去分词 bought，构成被动含义的修饰语。

× This issue should be discussed over different periods of time, because 10 or 20 years ago the bike is very popular in our country and every children have their own bike and people buy ride a bike to go to the job but this time we m- use more

✓ This issue should be discussed over different periods of time because 10 or 20 years ago bikes were very popular in our country. Every child had their own bike, and people rode bikes to get to work.

“10 or 20 years ago”明确表示过去，因此描述当时的情况应使用过去时：is 改为 were，have 改为 had，buy ride 应改为 rode。句末内容被截断，无法根据现有信息可靠地补全。

× 10 or 20 years ago the bike is very popular in our country and every children have their own bike.

✓ 10 or 20 years ago bikes were very popular in our country, and every child had their own bike.

这里是在泛指自行车，应用复数 bikes，而不是 the bike。every 后面必须接单数名词，因此 children 应改为 child。

× Every children have their own bike.

✓ Every child had their own bike.

every 后面的中心名词是单数 child，因此谓语动词也要与单数主语一致。描述过去的情况时，应使用 had，而不是 have。

× People buy ride a bike to go to the job.

✓ People rode bikes to get to work.

buy 和 ride 被直接连在一起，形成了不正确的动词结构。这里想表达过去人们骑车上班，可直接使用过去式 rode。