Bike— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Ответьте прямо и используйте прошедшее время: «I had a bike», а не «I have a bike». Выражение «they give me love for cycling» звучит неестественно; лучше сказать, что родители привили вам любовь к езде на велосипеде. Уточните, чем велосипед был особенным, и уберите слова-паразиты. Например, можно упомянуть, что он был большим или что вы часто катались на нём с родителями.

例: Yes, I did. I had a big blue bicycle, and I loved riding it around our neighbourhood. My parents were keen cyclists, so they encouraged me to enjoy cycling too.

提案: Сначала дайте ясный ответ: «Yes, I think bikes are quite popular». Исправьте грамматику: говорите «people want to improve their health» и «use bikes for short trips». Вместо «more good» используйте «better». Ответ обрывается на «because», поэтому завершите мысль конкретной причиной, например тем, что велосипеды не производят выхлопных газов. Добавьте один связный пример и избегайте повторов.

例: Yes, I think bikes are quite popular in my country. Many people ride them for short trips because cycling is a convenient way to stay fit. It is also better for the environment, as bikes do not produce exhaust fumes.

× I have a very big and wonderful bicycle when I was a child.

✓ I had a very big and wonderful bicycle when I was a child.

The sentence refers to a period in the past, so use the past-tense verb had instead of have.

× My parents are the professional bikers.

✓ My parents are professional bikers.

Do not use the definite article the when describing someone's profession in general. Say professional bikers.

× They give me love for cycling when I was young.

✓ They gave me a love of cycling when I was young.

The time expression when I was young refers to the past, so use gave. The phrase a love of cycling is also the natural grammatical expression.

× A lot of people are want to improve their health.

✓ A lot of people want to improve their health.

Want is a main verb and should not be preceded by are here. Use want directly after the plural subject people.

× They say think that use bike for like short trips.

✓ They think that using bikes for short trips is better for the environment.

The original clause has an unnecessary say and lacks a clear subject for use. Restructure it with using bikes as the subject of the that-clause.

× Use bike for short trips.

✓ Use bikes for short trips.

The sentence refers to bikes in general, so use the plural noun bikes rather than the singular bike without an article.

× It's more good for the environment.

✓ It's better for the environment.

Good has an irregular comparative form: better. Do not form its comparative with more.

× It's more it's more good for the environment, for the world because.

✓ It's better for the environment and the world.

The original is repeated and ends with because without giving a reason, leaving the sentence incomplete. Remove the repetition and finish the thought as a complete sentence.