Bike— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: 질문에 직접 답한 점은 좋지만, 과거 경험이므로 현재형인 “I have”와 “I ride” 대신 과거형 “I had”와 “I rode”를 사용하세요. “I have a bike very well”은 자연스럽지 않으니 자전거를 소유했다는 뜻으로 “I had a bike”라고 말하면 됩니다. “ride a bike”가 반복되므로 한 번만 사용하고, 한강에서 무엇을 했는지 구체적으로 덧붙여 보세요.

例: Yes, I had a bike when I was a child. I often rode it with my brother along the Han River, especially on weekends. We enjoyed exploring the riverside paths together.

提案: 자전거가 인기가 있다고 답한 뒤 한강에서 본 모습을 근거로 든 점은 좋습니다. 다만 “everyone or some people”처럼 서로 모순되는 표현 대신 “many people”을 사용하고, “family”의 반복과 “uh” 같은 망설임을 줄이세요. “lending a bike is so former”는 의미가 분명하지 않으므로, 자전거 대여가 흔하다는 뜻이라면 “bike rental is very popular”라고 표현하세요. 현재의 관찰을 바탕으로 사람들이 자전거를 타는 이유도 한 가지 덧붙이면 답변이 더 완성됩니다.

例: Yes, I think bikes are quite popular in my country. When I visit the Han River, I often see many people cycling with their friends and families. Bike rental is also popular, so people can enjoy cycling even if they don’t own a bike.

× When I was a child, uh, I have a bike very well.

✓ When I was a child, I had a bike.

The question asks about the past, and the phrase 'when I was a child' also establishes a past time. Use 'had' instead of 'have.' 'Very well' does not fit the meaning here, so it is omitted.

× I always ride a bike with my brother and go to Hangang and ride a bike.

✓ I always rode a bike with my brother, went to Hangang, and rode a bike there.

The student is describing childhood activities in response to a past-tense question. Use the past forms 'rode' and 'went' to keep the verbs consistent with that time frame.

× Lending a bike is so former.

✓ Renting bikes is very popular.

'Former' means 'previous' and does not describe how popular bike rental is. Use the adjective 'popular' to express that bike rental is common or well-liked. 'Renting bikes' also conveys the likely intended meaning more naturally than 'lending a bike.'