Bike— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Answer directly in the past tense and avoid repeating yourself. Describe the bike clearly; “wheels” may be the word you mean instead of “windows.” Explain what made it special, and finish with a clear detail about how you used it. Use linking words such as “and” or “because” to connect your ideas.

例: Yes, I had a bike when I was a child. It was a beautiful bicycle, and I loved riding it around my neighborhood. I could ride quite far on it, so it gave me a great sense of freedom.

提案: Give a clear opening answer, then explain why bikes are popular. Avoid repeating “people” and “bikes,” and use a complete, natural comparison such as “cheaper than cars.” Clarify your point about narrow roads and add one specific benefit or example.

例: Yes, bikes are quite popular in my country, especially in crowded cities where many roads are narrow. They’re convenient and much cheaper to run than cars. I think they’re also a practical way to get around for short journeys.

× Yes, I have.

✓ Yes, I did.

The question uses the past-tense auxiliary did, so the answer should use did as well. Match the tense of a short answer to the tense of the question.

× So I can ride my bicycle with the sport too.

✓ So I could ride my bicycle with it, too.

The speaker is describing childhood, so could is more appropriate than can for past ability. Use could to describe what you were able to do in the past.

× Far, so far, super far.

✓ I could ride it very far.

This is a fragment without a subject or a verb. Make it a complete sentence by adding a subject and a verb, such as I could ride it.

× Mostly the bikes are popular because people uh the roads are narrow so the people only love to travel the new um bike I usually prefer the bikes rather than the cars.

✓ Bikes are popular mainly because the roads are narrow, so people prefer traveling by bike. I usually prefer bikes to cars.

When referring to bikes, roads, people, and cars in general, do not use the definite article the. Also, separate the ideas into complete sentences to make the meaning clear. Use prefer bikes to cars for a standard comparison.

× People only love to travel the new um bike.

✓ People prefer traveling by bike.

Use by before a mode of transportation, as in travel by bike. Do not put a directly after travel when describing how someone travels.

× And they can they are convenient and they are less they are cheaper than the cars.

✓ They are convenient, and they are cheaper than cars.

The original sentence repeats and interrupts its clause, making the structure incomplete. State each idea once and connect the clauses clearly. Remove the before cars because cars is used generally.