Bike— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Answer directly, then describe the bike in one or two clear sentences. Correct the phrase “a pink in color” to “pink” and avoid restarting sentences. The phrase “a balanced bag” is unclear; use the accurate term for the bike or explain what you mean. You can also add a specific detail about how you used it.

例: Yes, I had a bike when I was a child. It was pink and had four wheels, which helped me feel steady when I rode it.

提案: Give a clear answer and support it with one specific reason or example. Remove the repeated phrase “from one place to another” and correct “in a in my country” to “in my country.” Use plural agreement: “bikes are eco-friendly” and “people use them.” Link your ideas smoothly rather than joining several points in one long sentence.

例: Yes, bikes are quite popular in my country, especially in busy cities. They are an affordable and eco-friendly way to commute, and they can be more convenient than cars in heavy traffic.

× It was a pink in color.

✓ It was pink in color.

The article a cannot be used before the adjective pink in this sentence. Remove a, or say It was pink.

× Yes, I do think that bikes are popular in a in my country because it is difficult these days to travel from one place to another.

✓ Yes, I do think that bikes are popular in my country because it is difficult these days to travel from one place to another.

The article a is incorrectly placed before in my country. Use in my country without an article.

× That is why bikes are very important and it is eco-friendly so many people are using it for the environment as well to commute from one place to another.

✓ That is why bikes are very important and they are eco-friendly, so many people use them to commute from one place to another.

The pronouns it and them refer to bikes, which is plural, so use they and them. Use a comma before so to connect the clauses clearly. The simple present use is a natural choice for describing a general habit.