Bike— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: 回答方向明确，也提到了想要自行车的原因和用途，但时态与语法错误较多。讲过去的经历时统一使用过去时，例如将“have”改为“had”；“hope my parents to buy”应改为“hoped my parents would buy”或“asked my parents to buy”。避免重复“I”，并用更自然的表达说明你想和同学一起骑车。

例: Yes, I did. I wanted a bike because many of my friends had one. I hoped my parents would buy me one so I could ride with them after school.

提案: 你直接回答了问题，也尝试说明自行车受欢迎的原因，但原因表达重复且语法不正确。“because ride a bike”应改为“because cycling”；“can make our environment is good”可改为“is better for the environment”。建议补充一个具体理由，例如自行车不排放尾气，或适合短途通勤。

例: Yes, they’re quite popular in my country. Many people ride bikes for short journeys because cycling is affordable and produces no exhaust fumes. It’s also a convenient way to get around busy areas.

× When I was a child, I have a bike because I saw many children at the same age have a bike, so I I hope my parents to buy a bike for me so that I can play with them after school.

✓ When I was a child, I had a bike because I saw many children my age with bikes, and I wanted my parents to buy one for me so that I could play with them after school.

这句话描述的是童年时期的经历，主要时间背景是过去，因此应将表示拥有的“have”改为过去式“had”。“hope”和“can”也应分别改为“wanted”和“could”，与过去的时间背景保持一致。讲述过去经历时，注意检查句中的主要动词是否都与过去时间相符。

× When I was a child, I have a bike because I saw many children at the same age have a bike, so I I hope my parents to buy a bike for me so that I can play with them after school.

✓ When I was a child, I had a bike because I saw many children my age with bikes, and I wanted my parents to buy one for me so that I could play with them after school.

“hope my parents to buy”中的动词搭配不正确。可以说“hope that my parents would buy...”或“want my parents to buy...”；本句使用“wanted my parents to buy”。另外，“I I”是重复主语，保留一个“I”即可。检查动词后面的结构，并避免重复主语。

× Bikes are very popular in my country, um, because ride a bike, mmm, can make our environment is good for our environment.

✓ Bikes are very popular in my country because riding a bike can make the environment better.

“ride a bike”在这里作“because”从句的主语，应使用动名词形式“riding a bike”。动词短语作主语时，通常需要使用动词-ing形式，例如“Riding a bike is fun.”

× Bikes are very popular in my country, um, because ride a bike, mmm, can make our environment is good for our environment.

✓ Bikes are very popular in my country because riding a bike can make the environment better.

“make”后接宾语和形容词作宾语补足语，结构是“make + 宾语 + 形容词”，所以应说“make the environment better”，不能在“make our environment”后再加“is good”。同时，“for our environment”造成了重复表达。建议使用“make + 名词 + 形容词”来表达“使……变得……”。