Bike— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Use the past tense because the question asks about your childhood: say “I had” rather than “I do have,” and “when I was a child” rather than “when I’m child.” You can keep your personal detail about the bike’s color and combine the ideas smoothly.

例: Yes, I had a bike when I was a child. It was pink, and I thought it was really lovely.

提案: Answer directly, then support your opinion with a clear example. Avoid the repeated subject in “people I know they,” use “ride bikes,” and say “I’m from Hangzhou” and “a city that’s very suitable for cycling.” Link the points naturally and use precise vocabulary such as “bike-friendly.”

例: Yes, bikes are quite popular in China. For example, many people ride them to school or work. I’m from Hangzhou, which is a beautiful and bike-friendly city, so cycling is especially common there.

× Yeah, I do have a bike when I'm child.

✓ Yeah, I had a bike when I was a child.

The question asks about the student's childhood, so the answer should use the past tense. Use had instead of do have and was instead of am.

× Yeah, I do have a bike when I'm child.

✓ Yeah, I had a bike when I was a child.

Child is a singular countable noun, so it needs an article. Say a child, not child.

× Definitely a lot of people I know they drive, ride bike to school or go to work.

✓ Definitely, a lot of people I know drive or ride bikes to school or work.

The phrase a lot of people I know already provides the subject, so adding they creates a redundant subject. Use one subject for the sentence and connect the activities clearly.

× Definitely a lot of people I know they drive, ride bike to school or go to work.

✓ Definitely, a lot of people I know drive or ride bikes to school or work.

Bike is a countable noun. Since the sentence refers to many people and bikes in general, use the plural form bikes.

× And also since I came from Hangzhou, that's a very pretty city to very suitable for riding a bike.

✓ Also, since I come from Hangzhou, I think it is a very pretty city and is very suitable for cycling.

The student is describing their current place of origin, so the present tense come is more appropriate than came. Use the present tense for a fact that is still true.

× And also since I came from Hangzhou, that's a very pretty city to very suitable for riding a bike.

✓ Also, since I come from Hangzhou, I think it is a very pretty city and is very suitable for cycling.

The construction a very pretty city to very suitable is not grammatical. Connect the two descriptions with and: a very pretty city and very suitable for cycling.