Bike— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: 回答中有具体经历，但开头说“记不清”与后面清楚回忆父亲买车的内容矛盾。建议直接回答有或没有，再按时间顺序讲述经历。注意使用正确表达：ride a bike（骑自行车），for a long time（很长时间），didn't pay attention（没有注意），以及 broke my leg（摔断了腿）。最后说明受伤后的结果，例如休息了几周。控制在三到四句，并用 but 或 so 衔接。

例: Yes, I did. My father bought me a bike when I was ten, and I rode it for a long time. I was really happy with it, but one day I wasn't paying attention and fell off, breaking my leg. I had to rest at home for a few weeks.

提案: 先明确回答自行车是否受欢迎，再用一到两个清楚的理由展开。当前表达中有多处难以理解的词组，例如“driving a system right vice”和“a height of green transportation”；可以改用 cars、a convenient form of transport、environmentally friendly 等相关词汇。说明开车和骑车的对比时，使用简单准确的句子，并补充具体好处，例如减少污染或节省短途出行费用。

例: Bikes are still popular in my country, especially in smaller cities. Although many people drive cars because they are convenient, cycling is a greener and cheaper option for short trips. It also helps reduce air pollution and gives people a bit of exercise.

× After getting the buy, I wrote it for very long time and was very happy, but I didn't paid attention and broke my leg.

✓ After getting the buy, I wrote it for a very long time and was very happy, but I didn't pay attention and broke my leg.

“time”在这里是可数名词短语的一部分，表达“一段很长的时间”时应说“a very long time”，不能省略冠词“a”。

× After getting the buy, I wrote it for very long time and was very happy, but I didn't paid attention and broke my leg.

✓ After getting the buy, I wrote it for a very long time and was very happy, but I didn't pay attention and broke my leg.

在一般过去时的否定句中，助动词“didn't”后面应接动词原形，因此应将“paid”改为“pay”。

× I have to rest far away.

✓ I had to rest far away.

这句话描述的是童年时受伤后的情况，语境是过去时，因此应将“have to”改为过去式“had to”。

× I think cycling is a height of green transportation which helps protect the development can reduce our transition costs.

✓ I think cycling is a height of green transportation which helps protect the development and can reduce our transition costs.

关系从句中“which”引出的主语后出现了“helps”和“can reduce”两个并列谓语，但中间缺少连接词。加上“and”可以连接这两个谓语，使句子结构完整。