Bike— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Вы прямо отвечаете на вопрос и пытаетесь добавить описание, но ответ заканчивается незавершённой и трудно понятной фразой. Уберите повтор «I I», используйте естественную формулировку вместо «the most beautiful bike I have ever had» и добавьте один ясный конкретный факт о велосипеде, например его цвет или то, где вы на нём катались.

例: Yes, I had a bike when I was a child. It was pink, and I thought it was beautiful. I often rode it around my neighborhood.

提案: Вы отвечаете на вопрос и приводите пример из жизни своей семьи, что делает ответ содержательным. Исправьте согласование: «every family has». Вместо «in the country» скажите «in my country», а «free bicycles» замените на «three bicycles», если вы имеете в виду количество. Последнюю мысль сформулируйте полным предложением и используйте связку, например «For example».

例: Yes, I think bikes are popular in my country because many families own bicycles for both children and adults. For example, my family has three bikes: one for me, one for my younger sister, and one for my mother.

× It was the most beautiful bike I I have ever had.

✓ It was the most beautiful bike I had ever had.

Because the student is describing a bike from childhood and looking back from that past time, the past perfect form had ever had is appropriate. Avoid repeating the subject pronoun I.

× I think bikes are popular in the country because every family have several bicycles for kids and adults.

✓ I think bikes are popular in the country because every family has several bicycles for kids and adults.

Every family is grammatically singular, so the verb in the present simple must take the third-person singular form has, not have.

× There are for me and my younger sister and my mother.

✓ There is one for me, one for my younger sister, and one for my mother.

The original sentence is incomplete because there are is not followed by a noun or another suitable complement. Name each bicycle with one to make the sentence complete and clear.