Bike— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Bạn trả lời đúng hướng nhưng câu chưa hoàn chỉnh và có nhiều từ ngập ngừng. Hãy dùng quá khứ đơn để kể về món quà (ví dụ: “I had”, “bought”, “was”), sửa “pie” thành “bike”, và tránh lặp “because”. Nên nêu cảm xúc hoặc lý do bạn thích chiếc xe bằng một câu hỗ trợ cụ thể.

例: Yes, I had a bike when I was a child. My mum bought it for my eighth birthday, and I loved riding it around our neighbourhood.

提案: Câu trả lời còn dang dở và chưa nêu rõ ý chính. Hãy trả lời trực tiếp rằng xe đạp có phổ biến hay không, sau đó giải thích bằng một lý do cụ thể. Dùng tên địa danh chính xác (“Hanoi”) và phân biệt “bikes” với “motorbikes”; tránh lặp từ và kết thúc câu đầy đủ.

例: Bicycles are not very popular for commuting in Hanoi. The streets are crowded, so most people prefer motorbikes because they are faster and more convenient.

× I have a pie because my mom bought it for me because it is my birthday, when I'm 8 years old

✓ I had a bike because my mom bought it for me for my birthday when I was 8 years old.

The question asks about your childhood, so use the past tense. Change have to had, it is to it was, and I'm to I was. Use for my birthday to express the occasion when the bike was bought.

× I'm very love this

✓ I loved it very much.

Love is a main verb, so it cannot follow am in this sentence. Also, the answer refers to a childhood experience, so use the past tense loved. Use very much to modify the verb loved.

× At present is my country Hanu is Hannu um cities. It is the center of Hannu capital

✓ At present, Hanoi is a city in my country. It is the capital of my country.

The original clauses do not have a clear grammatical structure. Use a subject followed by a verb, as in Hanoi is, and state the relationship clearly. If you mean that Hanoi is your country's capital, say It is the capital of my country.

× many people use a motorbike instead of bike and cars

✓ Many people use motorbikes instead of bicycles and cars.

The sentence describes types of transport in general, so use plural nouns consistently: motorbikes, bicycles, and cars. This avoids using a singular countable noun with no article.

× to move in the streets

✓ to travel on the streets

Use on the streets when referring to traveling along roads. In the streets is less appropriate in this context.