Bike— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: 先直接回答问题，再按时间顺序讲述经历。注意使用过去时：例如用“my dad bought me”而不是“was brought by my dad”，用“while I was shopping”表达“当我购物时”。“I was annoyed”表示“我很生气”；如果想说父母责备了你，可以说“my parents scolded me”。避免重复和过多自我修正，控制在三句话左右。

例: Yes, I did. My dad bought me a bike when I was a child, but unfortunately, it was stolen while I was shopping one day. I was really upset, and my parents scolded me for not being more careful.

提案: 观点明确，也提供了使用场景和原因。可以把“I think yes”改为更自然的“Yes, definitely”，并避免重复使用“to go”。注意名词单复数和固定表达：说“e-bikes”或“electric bikes”，“they are environmentally friendly”。用连接词把便利性和环保优势自然地串联起来。

例: Yes, definitely. Bikes, especially e-bikes and shared bikes, are quite popular in my country because people use them to commute or run errands. They’re convenient for short trips, and they’re also more environmentally friendly than cars.

× When I was a child and I have had I had a bike which was brought by my dad but sadly it was stolen by someone when I'm shopping when I was shopping in the street.

✓ When I was a child, I had a bike that was brought by my dad, but sadly, someone stole it while I was shopping.

叙述童年经历和自行车被偷的事情时，应使用过去时。原句中的“I have had”和“I'm shopping”与过去的时间背景不一致；“I have had I had”和“when I'm shopping when I was shopping”也包含重复表达。描述过去拥有自行车用“I had”，描述当时正在购物用“while I was shopping”。

× So it's very annoyed.

✓ So it was very annoying.

“annoyed”通常形容感到烦恼的人，“annoying”形容令人烦恼的事。这里说的是自行车被偷这件事令人烦恼，因此用“annoying”。由于是在讲过去的经历，还应将“it's”改为“it was”。

× Today many people will try to use E bike or shared bikes to go to work or to go shopping or to go traveling and they are very convenient.

✓ Today, many people use e-bikes or shared bikes to go to work, go shopping, or travel, and these bikes are very convenient.

这里泛指多种自行车，应使用复数“e-bikes”，与后面的“shared bikes”保持一致。谈论当前普遍的情况时，用“use”比“will try to use”更合适；“will”通常表示将来或预测。

× Also it is environmental friendly so I say yes.

✓ Also, they are environmentally friendly, so I think so.

修饰形容词“friendly”需要用副词“environmentally”，不能用形容词“environmental”。这里指代前文的多种自行车，应用复数代词“they”。