Bike— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Answer directly using the past tense, since the question asks about your childhood. Remove fillers and unclear phrases such as “pen” and “high speed is 180.” If you remember the bike’s model or colour, describe it clearly, then add one relevant detail about how you used it.

例: Yes, I had a bike when I was a child. It was a black GT bicycle, and I used to ride it around my neighbourhood after school.

提案: Start with a clear opinion, such as “Yes, bikes are very popular in my country.” Avoid repeating “bike,” and use accurate phrases such as “three or four bikes” and “at least one.” Add a specific reason or example, and make sure the details are logically connected.

例: Yes, bikes are very popular in my country. Many families own three or four bikes, and most people have at least one. They are convenient for short trips, especially in busy areas where traffic can be heavy.

× Yes, I have a bike pen I have as a child and the bike I have is GT36650 which is in uh black color and it's a high speed is 180.

✓ Yes, I had a bike when I was a child. The bike I had was a GT36650, it was black, and its top speed was 180.

The question asks about your childhood, so use the past tense. Change have to had when describing owning the bike as a child. Use was for the bike's condition in the past as well.

× Yes, I have a bike pen I have as a child and the bike I have is GT36650 which is in uh black color and it's a high speed is 180.

✓ Yes, I had a bike when I was a child. The bike I had was a GT36650, it was black, and its top speed was 180.

In this sentence, in is unnecessary before a color. Say the bike was black or was black in color, rather than was in black color.

× Yes, I have a bike pen I have as a child and the bike I have is GT36650 which is in uh black color and it's a high speed is 180.

✓ Yes, I had a bike when I was a child. The bike I had was a GT36650, it was black, and its top speed was 180.

The phrase it's a high speed is 180 has two competing verb structures and is not grammatical. Use its top speed as the subject and say its top speed was 180. Its is possessive; it's means it is.

× Years in my country bike bike is very popular.

✓ Yes, bikes are very popular in my country.

The answer refers to bikes in general, so use the plural noun bikes rather than the singular bike.

× Years in my country bike bike is very popular.

✓ Yes, bikes are very popular in my country.

The plural subject bikes requires the plural verb are. A singular subject such as a bike would take is.

× Almost every family has a three or four bikes uh in with them and on average every family has to do bike at least.

✓ Almost every family has three or four bikes, and on average, every family has at least one bike.

Do not use the article a before the plural number phrase three or four bikes. Remove a and say three or four bikes.

× Almost every family has a three or four bikes uh in with them and on average every family has to do bike at least.

✓ Almost every family has three or four bikes, and on average, every family has at least one bike.

In is incorrectly placed before with them. In this sentence, the phrase is unnecessary; say that a family has three or four bikes.

× Almost every family has a three or four bikes uh in with them and on average every family has to do bike at least.

✓ Almost every family has three or four bikes, and on average, every family has at least one bike.

The phrase has to do bike at least does not form a grammatical sentence. To express that families own a minimum number of bikes, say has at least one bike.