Bike— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Answer directly, then add one relevant detail. Use the past tense for a childhood memory: say “when I was about five” rather than “while I'm about five.” You can also say “when I was in kindergarten.”

例: Yes, I had a bike when I was about five, while I was in kindergarten. It was a small red bike, and I used to ride it around the park with my parents.

提案: Give a clear reason and connect it logically to your answer. The phrase “I'm wasting my childhood” does not fit here; use “when I was a child” if you mean to describe your own experience. Also, say “get around” rather than “get out around,” and avoid fillers such as “uh” and “well.”

例: Yes, bikes are quite popular in my country, especially among families who don’t own cars. They’re an affordable and convenient way to get around, particularly for short trips. I used to ride one a lot when I was a child.

× Yes, I had a bike while I'm about 5 years old, uh, in the kindergarten.

✓ Yes, I had a bike while I was about 5 years old, uh, in kindergarten.

The answer refers to a period in the past, so use the past-tense form was instead of the present-tense form I'm. In this general context, say in kindergarten rather than in the kindergarten.

× Uh, yes, of course. Uh, cause well, I'm wasting my childhood, uh, lot of families don't have their own cars.

✓ Uh, yes, of course. Uh, because when I was a child, a lot of families didn't have their own cars.

The answer refers to the student's childhood, so use past-tense forms: was and didn't have. The phrase I'm wasting my childhood does not express the intended past-time meaning. Use when I was a child to introduce the time being discussed.

× Uh, yes, of course. Uh, cause well, I'm wasting my childhood, uh, lot of families don't have their own cars.

✓ Uh, yes, of course. Uh, because when I was a child, a lot of families didn't have their own cars.

Use a lot of before a plural countable noun such as families. Without a, the quantifier phrase is incomplete.

× So it was a, a great way for people in my country to get out around.

✓ So it was a great way for people in my country to get around.

Get around means to travel from place to place. The word out is not used in this expression, so remove it.