Bike— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Your answer responds directly and gives a clear reason, but “get myself killed” sounds quite dramatic in this context. Use a more natural expression such as “have an accident,” and briefly explain why your parents were concerned.

例: Yes, I had a bike as a child, but my parents sold it when I was 13. They were worried I might ride on busy roads and have an accident.

提案: Make the comparison grammatically clear: say “not as popular as” rather than “not as much as popular.” Use “they” to refer to bikes, and avoid the hesitant, unclear ending. Add one specific reason why people do not cycle often.

例: Bikes are fairly popular in my country, but they are not as widely used as they are in some other countries. Many people prefer cars or public transport, partly because the roads can be quite busy.

× Bikes are popular, but it is not as much as popular. Uh, as it is in other countries, like people do not use it that often, especially children, adults too.

✓ Bikes are popular, but they are not as popular as they are in other countries. People do not use them that often, especially children and adults.

The comparison pattern is not as + adjective + as. Therefore, say not as popular as, rather than not as much as popular. The original thought is also broken across the pause after popular; keeping the comparison together makes the sentence clearer.

× Bikes are popular, but it is not as much as popular. Uh, as it is in other countries, like people do not use it that often, especially children, adults too.

✓ Bikes are popular, but they are not as popular as they are in other countries. People do not use them that often, especially children and adults.

The pronouns referring to bikes should agree with the plural noun: use they rather than it and them rather than it. If you mean cycling rather than bicycles, you could instead say people do not cycle that often.

× Bikes are popular, but it is not as much as popular. Uh, as it is in other countries, like people do not use it that often, especially children, adults too.

✓ Bikes are popular, but they are not as popular as they are in other countries. People do not use them that often, especially children and adults.

Especially children, adults too is an incomplete phrase and does not clearly connect the two groups. Use especially children and adults as part of the complete sentence. Splitting the ideas into two sentences also avoids the unclear connection introduced by like.