Bike— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Answer directly, then describe the bike and explain why you liked it. Avoid repeating “I had a bike” and “my brother,” and complete your final thought instead of ending with “some.” Use natural phrasing such as “I liked it a lot” rather than “I like it so much” when talking about the past.

例: Yes, I had a bike when I was a child. It originally belonged to my older brother, but my parents gave it to me when he outgrew it. It was white with blue details, and I loved riding it around our neighborhood.

提案: Give a clear answer and support it with natural reasons or examples. Replace “a vehicle to transport” with “a convenient way to get around,” and use “children and teenagers” rather than “people from child to adolescents.” Make sure the final idea clearly refers to who likes bikes, and use a linking phrase such as “In addition.”

例: Yes, bikes are quite popular in my country. They’re a convenient and affordable way to get around, especially for short trips. In addition, many children and teenagers enjoy cycling for fun and exercise.

× So I like it so much.

✓ So I liked it so much.

The student is describing a bike from childhood, so the past tense is needed. Use liked rather than like to keep the verb tense consistent with had, got, and gave.

× It was white with some.

✓ It was white with some decorations.

With some introduces a phrase that needs a noun, so the sentence is incomplete as written. Add the noun that describes what the bike had, such as decorations or details.

× I think that bikes are so popular because it's a vehicle to transport and also a means of amusement.

✓ I think that bikes are so popular because they are vehicles for transportation and a means of recreation.

The plural subject bikes does not agree with the singular pronoun and verb it's. Use they are to refer to bikes. Also, vehicle for transportation and means of recreation are more natural expressions.

× So people from child to adolescents, I really like it.

✓ People from childhood through adolescence really like bikes.

The original sentence combines a subject about people with I, so the sentence structure is unclear. Rephrase it with people as the subject and remove the unrelated first-person pronoun. Childhood through adolescence also expresses the age range naturally.