Bike— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: 先直接回答过去是否有自行车，并注意使用过去时：用“I had”，不要用“I have”。说明是谁送的、何时送的，以及你的感受；可以用“because”或“and”连接信息。注意说“as a birthday present”和“I was really happy”，避免重复或说“pride present”。

例: Yes, I had a bike when I was a child. My mom gave it to me as a birthday present, and I was really happy because I could ride it around our neighborhood.

提案: 回答内容切题，也提供了观察到的例子，但要把“bag”改为“bikes”，并避免重复“see”和“lots of”。描述日常现象时可说“in the morning”和“ride bikes”；还可以补充一个具体原因，例如骑车方便或有助于锻炼。

例: Yes, bikes are quite popular in my country. For example, you can see many older people riding them in the park in the morning, as cycling is a convenient way to exercise.

× Yes, I have a child when I was a child.

✓ Yes, I had a bike when I was a child.

句子说的是童年时期的经历，属于过去时间。have 的过去式是 had，因此应使用 had。

× That is my mom, uh, my mom gave me as birthday present.

✓ It was a birthday present that my mom gave me.

原句中“That is my mom”与后面的“my mom gave me”连接不当，且“gave me”后缺少所给的东西。可以改为“It was a birthday present that my mom gave me”，用完整结构表达“那是我妈妈送给我的生日礼物”。

× My mom gave me as birthday present.

✓ My mom gave it to me as a birthday present.

可数名词单数 present 前需要冠词。这里泛指一份生日礼物，应使用不定冠词 a。

× I really happy.

✓ I was really happy.

原句缺少系动词。happy 是形容词，需要 be 动词连接主语和形容词；因为描述的是过去的感受，应使用 was。

× And in morning you can see lots of old people by bike in the park.

✓ And in the morning, you can see lots of old people riding bikes in the park.

表示“在早上”时，通常说 in the morning，需要在 morning 前加定冠词 the。