Bike— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Answer directly, then add one clear detail. Avoid repeating “Of course” and “absolutely,” use the correct word “bike,” and keep the verb tense consistent when talking about childhood (“wanted”). Finish your thought rather than restarting the description of your two bikes.

例: Yes, I had two bikes when I was a child. My parents wanted me to learn how to ride safely, so I used to practise in the park near our home.

提案: Give a clear opinion first, then support it with a specific reason or example. Replace the unclear phrase “control a big transportation” with natural wording such as “drive a car,” use “the environment,” and complete your final idea instead of ending at “protect.”

例: Yes, bikes are quite popular in my country, especially among children and people who commute short distances. They are affordable and help reduce traffic and air pollution, so many people see them as an environmentally friendly option.

× My parents want me to be able to drive, uh, to control uh transport.

✓ My parents wanted me to be able to drive, uh, to control transport.

The speaker is describing childhood and uses the past-tense phrase I had and the time expression when I was young. Therefore, want should be changed to wanted to keep the verb tense consistent.

× When I was young I had two bike.

✓ When I was young, I had two bikes.

The number two requires a plural countable noun. Add -s to bike to make it bikes.

× Children who are too young to control a big transportation

✓ Children who are too young to control a large vehicle

Transportation is generally an uncountable noun, so it does not normally take the article a. Vehicle is a countable noun and fits the intended meaning; use a vehicle instead.

× I think it's good for environment.

✓ I think it's good for the environment.

When referring generally to the natural world, English commonly uses the definite article the before environment. Say good for the environment.