Bike— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Answer in the past tense because the question asks about your childhood: say “Yes, I did.” Avoid repeating “a different game,” and use a natural phrase such as “played different games on our bikes.” You can also remove “Uh” to make the response smoother.

例: Yes, I did. I used to ride my bike with my friends in the evenings, and we often played different games on our bikes. It was a lot of fun.

提案: Give a direct answer and use “popular among children,” rather than “popular ... within the children.” Say “bikes” instead of “bags,” and use “for fun” or “to play games” to express the purpose naturally. A specific contrast between children and adults will make your answer clearer.

例: Yes, bikes are quite popular among children in my country. Many adults don’t use them for commuting, but children often ride them for fun and to play games with their friends.

× Yes, I do have a bike.

✓ Yes, I did have a bike.

The question asks about the past, when you were a child, so the answer should use the past-tense auxiliary did rather than the present-tense auxiliary do.

× When I was a child, I used to ride it with my friends in the evening and we used to play a different game, a different games with the bike.

✓ When I was a child, I used to ride it with my friends in the evening, and we used to play different games with the bike.

Different games is plural, so it should not be preceded by the singular article a. Avoid repeating the phrase with conflicting singular and plural forms; use different games.

× Bikes are much popular in a country within the children.

✓ Bikes are very popular among children in my country.

Much does not normally modify the adjective popular in this positive statement. Use very popular. Much can be used with comparative forms, as in much more popular.

× Bikes are much popular in a country within the children.

✓ Bikes are very popular among children in my country.

Within does not express the intended relationship here. Use among to refer to popularity in a group of people. The phrase in my country also clearly identifies the country being discussed.