Bike— Part 1 採点レポート
会話
Part 1
試験官
Did you have a bike when you were a child?
受験者
Yes I do, had a bike when I was a child. Initially I had a bicycle and then 'cause when I moved to high school, I needs a convenience to travel to my house, to my school.
試験官
Do you think bikes are popular in your country?
受験者
Yes, bikes are quite popular in our country. In fact, they are the basic conveyance to go to work or for a regular commute, uh, to a different uh for a regular commute, even for school going kids.
評価
総合
Part 1
Did you have a bike when you were a child?
スコア: 42.0提案: Answer directly using the past tense: “Yes, I did.” The phrase “Yes I do, had” mixes present and past tense, and “I needs a convenience” is grammatically incorrect and unclear. Explain that you needed a convenient way to travel to school after moving to high school. Avoid repeating “house” and “school,” and use a linking word such as “so” to connect the reason to your answer.
例: Yes, I did. I had a bike when I was a child, and I started using it to get to school when I moved to high school. It was a convenient way to travel there.
Do you think bikes are popular in your country?
スコア: 57.0提案: Your answer addresses the question and gives examples, but “basic conveyance” sounds unnatural here; say “a common way to get around” or “a popular form of transport.” Remove the repeated phrase “for a regular commute” and the fillers, and make the examples flow logically. You could mention commuters and schoolchildren in one concise supporting sentence.
例: Yes, bikes are quite popular in my country. They’re a common way for people to commute to work, especially in busy areas. Many schoolchildren also ride them because they’re affordable and convenient.
文法
× Yes I do, had a bike when I was a child.
✓ Yes, I did. I had a bike when I was a child.
The question asks about a past time, so the answer should use the past-tense auxiliary did, not the present-tense do. Add I before had to make it a complete sentence.
× Initially I had a bicycle and then 'cause when I moved to high school, I needs a convenience to travel to my house, to my school.
✓ Initially, I had a bicycle, and when I moved to high school, I needed a convenient way to travel from my house to school.
The sentence describes a past situation, indicated by had and moved, so needs should be changed to needed. Needed a convenient way is also a natural grammatical phrasing for expressing that you required transportation.
× Initially I had a bicycle and then 'cause when I moved to high school, I needs a convenience to travel to my house, to my school.
✓ Initially, I had a bicycle, and when I moved to high school, I needed a convenient way to travel from my house to school.
The subject is I, which does not take the third-person singular verb ending -s. In this past-time context, use needed, not needs.
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