Bike— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Answer directly and keep the past tense consistent: use “had” rather than “have.” Describe the small wheels as “training wheels,” and add a brief detail about how you used the bike. This will make your answer more natural and specific.

例: Yes, I had a bike when I was a child. It had training wheels on the sides, which helped me learn how to ride. I used to ride it around my neighborhood.

提案: Give a clear topic sentence, then support it with one or two concise reasons. Avoid repeating words or restarting phrases. Use “bikes save money,” “hobby” (not “hubby”), and “exercise” or “get exercise” (not “have an exercise”). Clarify that people may use bikes instead of taking a jeepney, and connect your reasons with words such as “also.”

例: Yes, I think bikes are popular in my country. They can help people save money because they are a cheaper alternative to taking a jeepney. Also, some people ride bikes as a hobby or to get exercise.

× When I was a child, I have a bike, the one with small wheels beside it.

✓ When I was a child, I had a bike, the one with small wheels beside it.

The sentence refers to a past period, signaled by 'when I was a child,' so use the simple past 'had' rather than the present-tense 'have.' Match the tense of the verb to the time being described.

× Yes, I think bikes are popular in our country because it saves it saves US money because we cannot, we we will, we will not ride a jeepney anymore. And at the same time some treat it as their hubby or as a way to have an exercise.

✓ Yes, I think bikes are popular in our country because it saves us money because we will not ride a jeepney anymore. And at the same time, some treat it as their hubby or as a way to have an exercise.

The fixed expression is 'at the same time,' which requires the definite article 'the' before 'same.' Include the article when using this expression.

× Yes, I think bikes are popular in our country because it saves it saves US money because we cannot, we we will, we will not ride a jeepney anymore. And at the same time some treat it as their hubby or as a way to have an exercise.

✓ Yes, I think bikes are popular in our country because it saves us money because we will not ride a jeepney anymore. And at the same time, some treat it as their hubby or as a way to get exercise.

In this meaning, 'exercise' is an uncountable noun, so it should not be preceded by 'an.' You can say 'get exercise' or 'exercise' without an article. Avoid using 'an' with uncountable nouns.