Bike— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Сразу и ясно ответьте на вопрос, а затем кратко объясните причину. Формулировка «I don't like everything that's connected with it» звучит неестественно: лучше сказать, что вы не любили ездить на велосипеде или считали это опасным. Исправьте грамматику: «at home», «my little brother really likes them». Последнюю мысль о том, что вы не согласны с братом, уточните: например, он считает велосипеды безопасными, а вы — нет.

例: No, I didn’t have a bike as a child because I thought cycling was dangerous. We have two bikes at home now, though, because my younger brother really enjoys riding them. I still prefer to be cautious.

提案: Начните с прямого ответа: «Yes, bikes are quite popular in my country». Сократите слова-паразиты («uh», «you know») и используйте правильную грамматику: «a very popular form of transport/activity», «people come to my town», «ride their bikes». Уточните, что именно происходит на фестивале, и используйте связку, например «For example».

例: Yes, bikes are quite popular in my country. For example, my hometown holds a two-day cycling festival that attracts visitors from many places. People bring their bikes and ride around the town together.

× But we have two bikes in home because my little brother is very like it and I don't agree with him.

✓ But we have two bikes at home because my little brother likes them very much, and I don't agree with him.

Use at home, not in home, to describe being at one’s residence. The preposition in is not used in this expression.

× But we have two bikes in home because my little brother is very like it and I don't agree with him.

✓ But we have two bikes at home because my little brother likes them very much, and I don't agree with him.

In the present simple, a third-person singular subject takes a verb ending in -s. Use likes, not is very like. To express preference, say likes them very much.

× But we have two bikes in home because my little brother is very like it and I don't agree with him.

✓ But we have two bikes at home because my little brother likes them very much, and I don't agree with him.

The pronoun it refers to two bikes, which is plural. Use them for a plural noun.

× Uh, you know, I think, uh, in my country bikes are very popular thing.

✓ In my country, bikes are a very popular form of transport.

Thing is a singular countable noun, so it needs an article. The correction uses a before the singular phrase a very popular form of transport.

× Uh, even in my native town we have a festival, umm, with bikes where a lot of people came in my town and uh, ride with their bikes everywhere for two days long.

✓ Even in my native town, we have a festival with bikes where a lot of people come to my town and ride their bikes around for two days.

The sentence describes a festival that takes place regularly, so the present simple should be used consistently. Change came to come to match have and ride.

× Uh, even in my native town we have a festival, umm, with bikes where a lot of people came in my town and uh, ride with their bikes everywhere for two days long.

✓ Even in my native town, we have a festival with bikes where a lot of people come to my town and ride their bikes around for two days.

Use come to a town when describing movement toward it. Also, ride their bikes is the standard construction; with is unnecessary before the object of ride.