Bike— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: You answer directly and add relevant details about who bought the bike and when you rode it. To sound more natural, say “my father bought me” instead of “my father got for me,” and replace “throughout my campus” with a more precise place, such as “around the neighborhood” if that is what you mean. Avoid fillers like “uh,” and use “in the evening” rather than “in the evening time.”

例: Yes, I had a bike when I was about six. My father bought it for me, and I used to ride it around the neighborhood in the evenings after I finished my homework.

提案: Your answer attempts to compare the past with the present, but the meaning becomes unclear in the final part. State clearly whether bicycles are popular now, and explain who uses them or what people use instead. Use “in India” rather than “in my country in India,” and avoid the unfinished phrase “transferred themselves to be to use.”

例: Bicycles used to be more common in India, but their popularity depends on the area. Some people still use them for short trips or commuting to work, while many others now rely on motorbikes or public transport.

× Bikes used to be very popular in my country in India uh in the earlier times, but with years passing by uh, bikes are more commonly used by people in the informal sector and others have transferred themselves to be to use.

✓ Bikes used to be very popular in India, but as the years passed, they became more commonly used by people in the informal sector, while others switched to using other forms of transport.

The phrase 'have transferred themselves to be to use' is not a grammatical structure for describing a change in people's transportation habits. Use 'switched to using' to express that people began using something else; 'switch to' is followed by a noun or a gerund. The revision also removes the redundant wording 'my country in India' and makes the contrast between the two groups clearer.