Bike— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Bạn trả lời trực tiếp và có đưa thêm thông tin về việc đạp xe, nhưng ý ở phần sau chưa rõ và một số cụm từ dùng sai. Hãy dùng thì quá khứ khi kể về tuổi thơ (ví dụ: “I rode”), nói “when I was bored” thay vì “when I'm boring”, và thay “go to ride” bằng “go for a ride” hoặc “go riding”. Tránh lặp lại và kết thúc bằng một chi tiết cụ thể, chẳng hạn bạn thường đi cùng ai hoặc đi đâu.

例: Yes, I had a bike when I was a child. I rode it almost every day after school, especially when I was bored. I often cycled around my neighborhood with my friends.

提案: Bạn đã nêu ý kiến và cố gắng giải thích lý do, nhưng câu trả lời bị ngắt giữa chừng, có nhiều từ đệm và cấu trúc ngữ pháp chưa tự nhiên. Hãy hoàn thành ý bằng một câu rõ ràng: trẻ em có thể đi xe đạp khi chưa có xe máy hoặc ô tô. Dùng “fun” thay vì “funny” để diễn tả hoạt động thú vị, đồng thời thêm một ví dụ cụ thể về nơi các em thường đạp xe.

例: Yes, bikes are popular in my country, especially among children. They can ride them around their neighborhoods before they are old enough to use a motorbike or a car. It is an affordable and enjoyable way to get around.

× I ride a bike every day in my free time.

✓ I used to ride a bike every day in my free time.

The answer is describing the student’s childhood, so the past habitual form used to ride is more appropriate than the present tense ride. Use used to + base verb for repeated past habits.

× So when I'm boring, I go to ride a bike around mine, around my city to see another children by.

✓ So when I'm bored, I ride my bike around my city to see other children nearby.

Boring describes something that makes people feel uninterested, while bored describes how a person feels. Use bored when describing your own feeling. The revision also uses nearby as the natural word for describing children who are close by.

× So when I'm boring, I go to ride a bike around mine, around my city to see another children by.

✓ So when I'm bored, I ride my bike around my city to see other children nearby.

Another is used before a singular countable noun, but children is plural. Use other before a plural noun: other children.

× Yes, I think bikes are very popular in my country because uh when uh children don't have a uh motorbike or a car so that they can ride a bike around the hometown and is that is so funny and that is a very uh good childhood so then we'll have a very uh

✓ Yes, I think bikes are very popular in my country because when children don't have a motorbike or a car, they can ride a bike around their hometown. It is fun, and it gives them a very good childhood.

The original sentence combines several clauses without clear structure. After because, use a complete clause, and do not connect because with so that in this construction. The phrase and is that is also lacks a clear, correctly formed clause. Separate the ideas into complete sentences and use it as the subject of It is fun.