Bike— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Your answer responds directly and gives a personal detail. To develop it, add one specific reason you enjoyed the bike or describe what you did with it. Use punctuation to separate your ideas.

例: Yes, I did. It was pink, and I really loved it because it was my first bike. I used to ride it around the neighborhood with my friends.

提案: You give a relevant reason—bikes are convenient in congested traffic—but several phrases are unclear or unnatural. Say “small and easy to maneuver” rather than “small, concise,” and “weave through traffic” rather than “flip through any road.” Keep the answer to a few clear sentences and use the plural “them” to refer to bikes.

例: Yes, I think bikes are quite popular in my country, especially in busy cities. They’re small and easy to maneuver, so people can weave through traffic during rush hour. This makes them a convenient way to get around when the roads are congested.

× Bikes in my country are used very often while travelling during peak traffic hours as the small, concise and you can flip through any road, so I think people find it really convenient to use it in my country where there's a lot of congestion.

✓ Bikes in my country are used very often while travelling during peak traffic hours because they are small and concise, and you can flip through any road, so I think people find them really convenient to use in my country, where there's a lot of congestion.

The phrase as the small, concise has no verb, so it does not form a complete clause. Add a subject and verb, such as they are, to make the clause complete. In this context, because also clearly introduces the reason bikes are convenient.

× Bikes in my country are used very often while travelling during peak traffic hours as the small, concise and you can flip through any road, so I think people find it really convenient to use it in my country where there's a lot of congestion.

✓ Bikes in my country are used very often while travelling during peak traffic hours because they are small and concise, and you can flip through any road, so I think people find them really convenient to use in my country, where there's a lot of congestion.

The pronoun it is singular, but it refers to bikes, which is plural. Use them to refer to bikes. Keep the pronoun number consistent with the noun it replaces.