Bike— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Answer directly, then add one or two clear details. Avoid restarting words such as “li-,” and replace “many blue hood” with the place you mean, such as “my neighborhood.” Use a natural phrase like “when I was about four” rather than “around when I was four years old.”

例: Yes, I did. I had a green bike, and I used to ride it around my neighborhood every afternoon. I learned to ride without training wheels when I was about four.

提案: You give a clear opinion and relevant reasons. Improve the answer by splitting the long final sentence and avoiding the repeated/stumbled word “congesti congestion.” Also, say “the government promotes cycling as a form of exercise” for more natural phrasing.

例: Yes, I think they are quite popular, especially in Marikina, where the city has built dedicated bike lanes. Cycling is cheaper than driving, and it helps people avoid traffic. The government also promotes it as a good form of exercise.

× I used to ride it every afternoon around many blue hood.

✓ I used to ride it every afternoon around many blue hoods.

The quantifier many must be followed by a plural countable noun. Hood is singular, so it should be hoods. If you meant your local area, say around my neighborhood instead.

× I learned to ride without training wheels around when I was four years old.

✓ I learned to ride without training wheels when I was four years old.

Around is unnecessary before the time clause when I was four years old. Use when directly to state the age at which you learned to ride.