Bike— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Trả lời trực tiếp và diễn đạt rõ thời điểm bạn có xe đạp. Sửa cấu trúc “that a gift” thành “which was a gift”, dùng “he” để chỉ người cha, và tránh lặp từ “gift”. Có thể bổ sung một chi tiết ngắn về chiếc xe hoặc cảm xúc của bạn.

例: Yes, I had a bike when I was a child. My father gave it to me for my eighth birthday, and I was really excited to ride it.

提案: Nêu ý kiến trực tiếp, sau đó đưa ra một hoặc hai lý do cụ thể. Sửa ngữ pháp thành “bikes are popular” và “they are affordable”; không cần lặp ý “buy” và “own”. Diễn đạt lợi ích sức khỏe tự nhiên hơn bằng “they help people stay healthy”.

例: Yes, bikes are quite popular in my country. They are affordable and convenient for short trips, and cycling also helps people stay healthy.

× Just when I was a child I had a bike that a gift of my father.

✓ When I was a child, I had a bike that was a gift from my father.

The clause that a gift is missing a verb. Add was to make it a complete clause: that was a gift. Use from to indicate who gave the bike.

× Just when I was a child I had a bike that a gift of my father.

✓ When I was a child, I had a bike that was a gift from my father.

Use from, not of, to identify the person who gave someone a gift. For example, say a gift from my father.

× She bought it for me as a gift on my birthday when I was 8 years old.

✓ He bought it for me as a gift on my birthday when I was 8 years old.

She does not agree with the previously mentioned noun father. Use he to refer to a father. If the person’s gender is unknown, use they.

× Yes definitely bike a really popular in my country because it's affordable for everyone to buy it and to own it and is also have improve the well-being in general.

✓ Yes, definitely. Bikes are really popular in my country because they are affordable for everyone to buy and own, and they have also improved people's well-being in general.

The answer refers to bikes in general, so use the plural noun bikes rather than the singular bike.

× Yes definitely bike a really popular in my country because it's affordable for everyone to buy it and to own it and is also have improve the well-being in general.

✓ Yes, definitely. Bikes are really popular in my country because they are affordable for everyone to buy and own, and they have also improved people's well-being in general.

The plural subject bikes requires the plural verb are. The later clause also refers to bikes, so use they have rather than is.

× Yes definitely bike a really popular in my country because it's affordable for everyone to buy it and to own it and is also have improve the well-being in general.

✓ Yes, definitely. Bikes are really popular in my country because they are affordable for everyone to buy and own, and they have also improved people's well-being in general.

Since the answer refers to bikes in the plural, use the plural pronoun they rather than the singular it. Keep the pronoun consistent throughout the sentence.

× Yes definitely bike a really popular in my country because it's affordable for everyone to buy it and to own it and is also have improve the well-being in general.

✓ Yes, definitely. Bikes are really popular in my country because they are affordable for everyone to buy and own, and they have also improved people's well-being in general.

The present perfect uses have or has followed by a past participle. The past participle of improve is improved, not improve.

× Yes definitely bike a really popular in my country because it's affordable for everyone to buy it and to own it and is also have improve the well-being in general.

✓ Yes, definitely. Bikes are really popular in my country because they are affordable for everyone to buy and own, and they have also improved people's well-being in general.

The sequence and is also have improve combines incompatible verb forms and does not form a grammatical clause. Use they have also improved to create a complete clause with a subject and a correctly formed verb.