Bike— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: 你直接回答了问题，也补充了自行车的来源和用途，结构基本完整。注意几个表达错误：“When I was child”应为“When I was a child”；“read it”应为“ride it”；去学校通常说“ride it to school”，而不是“for my school”。此外，“very important for me”不够具体，可以说明骑车为什么对你有帮助。

例: Yes, I did. My mum gave me a bike for my birthday when I was a child. I rode it to school almost every day, so it was a really useful gift.

提案: 你表达了明确观点，并给出了原因，但有多处语法和搭配问题：“bikes is”应为“bikes are”；“most people they”中的“they”多余；应说“take the bus”而不是“buy bus”，“take the subway”前通常加“the”；“save times”应为“save time”。另外，“I think”重复且“and”重复，可以删减并用更清晰的连接方式组织原因。

例: I don’t think bikes are very popular in my country. Most people prefer taking the bus or the subway because public transport is more convenient and saves them time.

× When I was child my mom gave me a bike as a birthday gift.

✓ When I was a child, my mom gave me a bike as a birthday gift.

可数名词 child 在这里是单数，前面需要加不定冠词 a。可以记住：单数可数名词通常不能单独使用。

× I think bikes is not very popular in my country because I think most people they love to buy bus or take subway because it's more convenient and and at the same time it can save times.

✓ I think bikes are not very popular in my country because I think most people they love to buy bus or take subway because it's more convenient and and at the same time it can save times.

主语 bikes 是复数，因此 be 动词应使用 are，而不是 is。注意根据主语的单复数选择相应的动词形式。

× I think bikes is not very popular in my country because I think most people they love to buy bus or take subway because it's more convenient and and at the same time it can save times.

✓ I think bikes is not very popular in my country because I think most people love to buy bus or take subway because it's more convenient and and at the same time it can save times.

most people 已经是 love 的主语，不需要再加 they。避免在同一个分句中重复使用主语和代词。

× I think bikes is not very popular in my country because I think most people they love to buy bus or take subway because it's more convenient and and at the same time it can save times.

✓ I think bikes is not very popular in my country because I think most people they love to buy a bus or take the subway because it's more convenient and and at the same time it can save times.

单数可数名词 bus 前需要加冠词 a；固定表达 take the subway 中，subway 前通常用 the。

× I think bikes is not very popular in my country because I think most people they love to buy bus or take subway because it's more convenient and and at the same time it can save times.

✓ I think bikes is not very popular in my country because I think most people they love to buy bus or take subway because it's more convenient and at the same time it can save times.

and 被连续重复使用了一次，保留一个即可。说话时可以注意检查重复的连接词。

× I think bikes is not very popular in my country because I think most people they love to buy bus or take subway because it's more convenient and and at the same time it can save times.

✓ I think bikes is not very popular in my country because I think most people they love to buy bus or take subway because it's more convenient and and at the same time it can save time.

time 在 save time（节省时间）这个表达中通常作不可数名词，不加复数词尾 -s。