Bike— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Answer directly, then explain your parents’ reason in one clear sentence. Use the past tense consistently: “didn’t have,” “believed,” and “might get hurt.” Say “a bike” rather than “any bike,” and avoid fillers and the ungrammatical phrase “I gonna hurt.”

例: No, unfortunately, I didn’t have a bike as a child. My parents believed it wasn’t suitable for a girl and worried that I might get hurt.

提案: Give a direct answer and support it with a specific observation. Avoid repeating “bike” and “see,” and remove fillers. Clarify the time phrase “for two or three years”—for example, say that bikes have become more popular in the past few years. Use “they” to refer to bikes.

例: Yes, bikes are quite popular in my country. They have become much more common over the past few years, and you can see people riding them in many parts of the city.

× Unfortunately I don't have any bike when I was a child.

✓ Unfortunately, I didn't have a bike when I was a child.

The phrase refers to a past time, indicated by 'when I was a child,' so the verb should also be in the past tense: 'didn't have.' Use 'a bike' for a singular countable noun.

× My parents believe that it's not good for a girl.

✓ My parents believed that it wasn't good for a girl.

The student is describing what the parents thought during the student's childhood, so the past-tense forms 'believed' and 'wasn't' fit the past context. Keep the verbs in the same time frame.

× Maybe I gonna hurt.

✓ Maybe I would get hurt.

'Gonna' is an informal form of 'going to' and needs a form of 'be' before it. Also, 'get hurt' expresses that the speaker might be injured. In this past context, 'would get hurt' is a suitable form.

× Nowadays we can see it everywhere.

✓ Nowadays we can see them everywhere.

'It' is singular, but it refers to 'bikes,' which is plural. Use the plural pronoun 'them' to agree with its antecedent.